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Tiger

He didn't believe me,
I told him I got into a knife fight with a tiger,
But I'm the feline felon
with the knife stripes down my skin.
How could I ever describe,
more than the icy mountains tell you,
for the pain I felt in words
was more than littered literature,
it was the screaming shell, the shallow scratch,
the emptiness within.

And when my skin goes tan,
I say i missed lines in fake bake,
but the white scars prickle softly,
bright as hot glass in the flame.
The body's shredded jigsaw,
is ridiculed by strangers,

never paved in pain,

they pity pale pitted patience,

without the maul of metal petals,

signing their disdain.

 

I got into a knife fight with a tiger

 

 

(But I'm the feline felon)


Please don't know my shame.

Author notes

True Story,
its hard you meet knew people and have to explain lol. turns out he didnt buy it.

uh///
the cat attacked me?

moonshinesuicide xxx

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  • bird-mad girl
    December 3, 2008

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    The use of the knife fight made me think of old fifties movies like Rebel without a Cause. I really loved that.

    I used the cat before. It worked to my surprise. But I don't think she was paying that much attention so it was okay. Have to be careful with all of that.

    You always come up with the most unique ways to describe situations like this. You always amaze me with your use of metaphor and language.

    xxx


  • dismantle-me
    December 2, 2008
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    "I told him I got into a knife fight with a tiger,
    But I'm the feline felon
    with the knife stripes down my skin."

    What a sad, beautiful image...the deadly but beautiful symbol of the tiger...and the hurt that leaves physical marks...

    Beautiful, moving poetry.


  • Lonely Christina
    December 1, 2008

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    lol i tried to use tht excuse b4. didnt work! haha good job with this my fav line was "The body's shredded jigsaw,
    is ridiculed by strangers,"