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Of Fear and Cheap Cologne

i'd hold tight
but the fear
rubs off,
like cheap cologne

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  • Yemassee gold member
    December 2, 2008

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    Best thing about a lot of these poems is how open ended they are. I guess the brevity makes this the most effective style and I'm surprised and pleased so many people seem to believe that.

    Here of course I wonder what the person needs to hold tight about, over what? Any type of relationship comes to mind where one expects us to wait for a resolution...when we fear what that result might me. It becomes a pregnant pause...and I too like the "cheap cologne" line, for it shows that fear...that the speaker won't be good at keeping that fear/worry/etc unnoticed.

    For me it would be looking at the refrigerator and being too petrified to open it for fear there will be no Moxie...my shocking tale of horror revealed!


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    December 2, 2008

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    What a comparison,
    heightening the senses,
    revealing the hesitation,
    the state of mind.

    loper in eleven words,
    as compelling as always!!

    M-C


  • Mari Goes gold member
    December 1, 2008

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    I so like this one!
    You managed well your 11 words. I really like how you connected the words fear and bad cologne there.
    well done!