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Desert Island Hideaway

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Hear time tick away,
Feel my mind stray,
Am I free?

Desert island, peace of mind,
Escape those who raid my mind,
Am I free?

Isolation rips through me,
Free is not what I hoped it'd be,

Rescue me.

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Author notes

“No one is free, even the birds are chained to the sky.”
-Bob Dylan

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  • Eusebius
    December 10, 2008
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    Short and very pity poem which moves rapidly with a very good flow and nifty rhyme... bravo!!!

  • She Stole My Voice
    December 1, 2008

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    The ending
    was heartbreaking.

    Thank you for entering and good luck ♥

    -rainbow