As embers lie on beds of hope,
ignition walks a thin tightrope.
Buried by a gentle breeze
or carried thru rustling trees,
love may die from time apart
or blaze again in the heart.
As embers lie on beds of hope,
ignition walks a thin tightrope.
Author notes
Distance is to love as wind is to fire. It extinguishes the weak and enkindles the great.
The Octelle, created by Emily Romano, is a poem consisting of eight lines using personification and symbolism in a telling manner.
The syllable count structure for this verse is 8, 8, 7, 7, 7, 7, 8, 8, and the rhyme scheme is aa/bb/cc/aa. The first two lines and the last two lines are identical.
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetic Form: Octelle - Prompt - Fire by Little Eagle.
600 points, ended December 27, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How do you think I could improve this poem?
Comments
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Thank you for your entry
Well done. This fire is more in the abstract and certainly uses personfication well. I really liked this. Thank you for following the prompt.
The form was followed perfectly, the rhyme scheme was well developed. Your syllable count was perfect.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy -
An excellent write. Skillfully crafted Octelle.
Very good meter. Lovely depth of feeling.
Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone.
Well penned. Best wishes in the contest.
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This is a great poem Liz. Good luck in the contest!
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This is beautiful. So short and simple, but great. Moving. I loved it. Amazing.
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