Sweetheart, can't you see the hazard this season causes as mistletoe kisses ignite almost electrical sparks between us?
Author notes
round one entry: electrical hazard: http://allpoetry.com/poem/4809891
author: shadowlyn infinitas
A contest entry
- 2 of 3 rounds of Christmas contests by daviscth.
2000 points, ended December 8, 2008, 31 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thoughts? Suggestions? Anything.
Comments
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I really like the concept of your sentence, I feel it would flow better if you either changed the word "almost"or eliminated it all together. some suggestions would be "those" or "little" Good luck in the contest.
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I never saw this one coming. You have posted a delightful DIFFERENT response from what I expected. Thanks for sharing in my contest.
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I'm happy to hear that you enjoyed my little twist on the phrase. best wishes
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