I take a hold of my friend ,
or is it my enemy?
go off into a place where its quiet and lonely
Against my wrist the sharp blade lies
as i feel my pressure intensify
and my whole life flashes before my eyes
Deep breaths i take and keep pressing down..
feeling that sweet satisfaction ,coming around.
Yes..relief is on its way
relief from this pain i feel
RELIEF! is all could say
As the red fluid begin to flow,
I ask ,"do i really want to go ?"
The pain i feel is too much for me..
so i take that route to set me free.
the scars i get i wont ever see
because they'll appear AFTER my destiny..
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Mrs D
Author notes
mrs d..
i have never actually came around to cutting myself..but i have came VERY CLOSE SEVERAL times .....but not just with the goal of temporary relief ...but really wanting to end my life because of the pain i was experiencing...thought that was the only way out ..i still sometimes take the knife to my wrists ...but something always holds me back.....i know its not right to do ...but i sympathize with cutters
A contest entry
- How do you deal with....? by Lonely Christina.
900 points, ended December 4, 2008, 40 entries
Gold trophy winner
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i apologize, for not leaving a longer comment, but this is too cliche. i have read this type of poem many times in the past hour, and nothing about this stands out, or makes me want to read more of your work
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interesting work you penned. imagery is quite morbid and great. thanks for sharing.
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omg this was a well ddeserved gold; Im afraid I have been here... it's not a nice place to be and I am glad that something held you back as it becomes an addiction, a vicous cycle and a battle to stop. lovely write!! I just love it!!
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i love love love it
it's so completely understandable.
<3
I never find so clear poems
made my day
♥
Keara
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thanks ALOT!!!!!
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wonderfully done, and you definately deserved gold!!!!
and please don't start cutting, once you do it's hard to stop.... congratulations! -
This is very well written and full of emotion and just grabs ones attention. Things like this can not be taken lightly. I know a lot of people who cut to give them physical pain to make up for the emotional pain that they are feeling.
Very nicely done!
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thank you soo much !!1
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you just told my story and blew this whole contest away. thnk you so much for entering...omg i love this. btw ur authors notes wow!
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