Water colour me in emotions,
for I am sinking..
Self inflictive wounds bind me,
in this tapestry of naked dreams..
Solitary was my confinement,
four walls bled my doom.
Caged destruction pleaded guilty,
crimes of passion, wept.
Author notes
"Weeping Nude" by Edvard Munch.
30 to 60 words
by Reptile Lady
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie: Picture Prompt: 30-60 words. by chilali.
550 points, ended December 14, 2008, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Great imagery with beautiful words and amazing flow! Well done. Great take on the wonderful painting. I love it. Thank you for your entry and good luck
Much love
Ylova
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thank you xx
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My dear friend...this write has trophies written all over it...Your choice of words, imagery and how you draw us in to the scene..Ooh....it is powerful! Hope you get top honors with the gold!
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what can i say, this is just amazing. there is nothing else to say. good luck in the contest hun. x x
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Julie this is wonderful and the opening is lovelymetaphor...very deep and true for many of us in self destruct...
best to you!
mystic
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I loved how you started Julie.."watercolor me in emotions.." just that paints such a lovely picture. You certainly know how to get the reader hooked. Lovely piece. This deserves a Gold. loved it. I'm sure Ylova will love it too.
Good luck to you
Love
Alyzeh
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Good lord, that opening stanza just floored me, my lovely sister.
This piece is fantastic, sad, real, and damn. . you just knocked the wind right outta me.
I am so jealous.
You're so much better with these kinds of writes than me.
Ahhh, inspiring love,
truly,
Love you always,
Jin
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Neat piece! Love the dark sorrow this portrays sis, superbly done! An excellent read. All the best in your contest
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a brilliant take on yhe promt julie wonderful imagery and emotions especaily solitary was my confinement four walls bled my doom good luck in the contest myfriend take caremaralisa
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Interesting darker take on the picture and so very well done here
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well done sis!! A truly heartfelt and most incredible piece indeed!!!!
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Very nice take on the prompt, bringing out her sad story of why she is weeping.
Best wishes in the contest
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it is a deep poem, very deep indeed.
i like it
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A lovely piece, expressing raw emotion. My best wishes.
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This is such an awesome poem for the prompt sis. You always manage to find just the right words. Good luck
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Yes... I think you've brought out the emotions portrayed in a wonderful way... you've added the intenisty missing in the painting with your words. I particularly love the 2nd Stanza... "tapestry of naked dreams..." a brilliant image... Well done...
Ken
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Ooh love this...
Short & bitter sweet...
And so much in your visualisation & imagery that leaves the reader thoughtful & ponderous as we are pulled along in the dark undercurrant of your words...
Well done!!!
Impressive as Always...
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