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Impressions

Lasting impression so compacting,
lay upon my life, so impacting.
Reminders upon heart that sting,
remain forever like scent of spring.

You came, we loved, you left, I cry,
footprints remain mid sorrow's sigh.
Invisible to everyone but me,
in my heart where no one can see.

Please lay dormant till heart lets go,
how long it will take, I do not know.
Footprints will crush my heart in two,
till somehow I forget love we knew.

 

 

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Contest Prompt... Footprints
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  • stavykm gold member
    December 12, 2008

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    Oh My Heart Is Breaking

    Oh Sandy I could so relate to this poem. It is so perfect for the contest but I also know with us both losing our sons that we suffer with crushed hearts. I pray for healing for the both of us. It is hard expecially through the Holidays and my prayers are with you my sweet dearest friend. Best wishes in the contest.

    Wishing You Many Blessings
    Try To Have Some Happy Moments These Holidays
    Much Love Always
    Kelle Marie


  • Puppydog gold member
    December 1, 2008

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    SAD BUT LOVELY!!!!

    Yes, there always seems to be footprints left upon our hearts and with enough time they will fade away.'s


    • Sandygram silver member
      December 5, 2008
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      Good Morning Kevin

      Thank you for reading. Always nice to hear from you. Have a wonderful and blessed day. Take care,

      Hugs and Smiles my friend,
      Sandy

  • mcheadle
    December 1, 2008
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    lovely write

    Sad and truthful...mac


    • Sandygram silver member
      December 1, 2008
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      Hello Dear Mac, Hugs and Smiles. I hope all is well in Ohio. Dark and cloudy here. Need you to chase that mean purple sun away for me. Always a pleasure to have you drop in. "Timber* Bless you always, Sandy

  • SoulWhispher
    December 1, 2008

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    Wow fantastic take on the prompt, this is such a wonderfully flowing and emotional poem, it speaks from the heart, and tells the story of lost love, again what can one say but great job, blessings with love John


    • Sandygram silver member
      December 1, 2008
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      Very Touching Coment

      Oh John, You are like sunshine when you stop by. You always brighten even the cloudiest day my friend. You do know when I write from my heart. Thank you so much for this thoughtful comment. Hugs and Smiles. Blessings filled with love, Sandy

  • chiefmac
    December 1, 2008

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    Nice take on the prompt. Your usual flair for rhyme (I envy) they tie the stanza together with smooth movement. The sorrow's and sigh are carried with the reader. Good luck with the contest


    • Sandygram silver member
      December 1, 2008
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      Thank You Dan

      You do encourage me about my writing. I so appreciate that so much coming from my dear friend. Always a pleasure to see youi stop by. Hugs and smiles. Many Blessings, Sandy


  • Angelo di Luce gold member
    December 1, 2008
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    You crafted a beauty here dear poetess
    Great flow and continuation of thought
    Well done


    • Sandygram silver member
      December 1, 2008
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      Great Comment

      Hi Angelo, I want to thank you for stopping by and reading. I appreciate your lovely comment. You take care, Sandy


  • Peteskid gold member
    December 1, 2008
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    Very nice, end rhyme is always difficult to achieve expression without giving in to the requirements of form, but here there is the genuine quality of someone in a difficult situation, the quality of sincere and heartfelt words here. Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging... PK


  • Rovingone gold member
    December 1, 2008

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    Ah, what a bittersweet sonnet you write here. It's almost like a folk song that records the sadness of a memory of a joyful time. Very sweet and beautifully written.


    • Sandygram silver member
      December 1, 2008
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      Good Afternoon

      So nice to see you stop by. Your comment was lovely and most appreciated. Thank you for reading. You take care, Sandy

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