i am at the edge of this blue green sea
standing on the cliff high above
its white caps clashing over the rocks
salty breeze blowing around me
i whisper "catch me before i fall"
dont let me fall into the rocks below
points jutting out of the water like knives
the wind blows harder
capturing my hair
blowing it behind me
you come up behind me
whispering promises to never let me fall
never leave me alone
you wrap your arms around me
standing only for a moment
although it feels like an eternity
and with that we fall
over the cliffs edge
with the sea drawing closer
together we descend
i should be afraid
i surely will die
instead i smile
extend my arms
feeling free
your arms still around me
speakingonly of my love for you
while you kiss my shoulder and whisper
"i love you too"
this is our life
we were meant for this
together we descend
into that sparkling sea
together we die
this is what we were made for
we die with smiles upon our lips and love in our still hearts
your arms never leave my body
together we die
this always our purpose
to live together in this descent
and die together in the end
this was made for us
the sea may have claimed our bodies
but never will capture our souls
together in the end
with a smile upons our lips and love still in our hearts
Author notes
okay... so i actually kind of like this one..its just i dnt know where to stop: at that last stanza/paragragh/what ever you want to call it or at this was made for us..let me know what you think???
hisangel
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thoughts???
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"never leave me along" - I think you want alone as the final word?
I would excise alot of the unnecessary, repetitive, and duplicate words (blue-green was too often for me). Good start. -
you did not put your name in the an you put anonomized but i will except it because i have to cleose this conteset
great poem otherwise
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Im sorry. I was im a rush bc i was im study hall.
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Awesome
Chica its me again and I wanted to say I absolutly love this poem. You are more talented then i thought. Oh i like the whole poem with the last stanza.
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