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God Spoke To Me The Other Day

God spoke to me the other day
what He spoke I cannot say
He made my fears shrivel away
I cannot say ,I cannot say

I  only remember he came into my room
said He'd protect me from all evil and doom
Now I remember that afternoon
a heavy monsoon ,a heavy monsoon

God came the other day to meet me
and said that the miracle of his work I shall see
He believed me to be a diligent devotee
I feel so free,I feel so free

I feel that day went well
I was no more a stubborn rebel
was it a dream?was it a spell?
perhaps a farewell,perhaps a farewell

Author notes

Credit Monotetra(an invented form of poetry) by Michael Walker

In this form of poetry,the rhyme scheme is ;

a
a
a
a

only that..the last line repeats itself.Repetition helps in acknowledging a better understanding of the verse/poem ,etc.

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  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    February 2

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    I like this...I have an old poem called "I spoke to Jesus yesterday" your title reminded me of mine and so i had to read!

    omg- and what is with the person below who says the poem is weird?? what is so weird about it?
    Isn't it weird that the person who sent the comment goes by the AP name Lucifer's child? Now that is weird...

    I think it is hard to write a poem about your true feelings towards God with a lot of support from others...I think they think its tacky but I just believe that they are just not ready to pour themselves out like you have. I guess we live in a world now where people think having faith is weird or something.

    here's my old poem if your curious on what I wrote...similar to yours

    http://allpoetry.com/poem/4158047

    anyway, well done. I like the repetition, it made the poem more powerful



  • piccola silver member
    January 28

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    this form reminds me somewhat of the cawing of a bird ...
    parrots and such do a strange repetition thing ... thank you for showing me this form


  • Rejected Easter Egg
    January 25

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    it's was cute, and I liked the repetition on the ending lines to be honest. I usually don't like such things. Good luck and thank you


  • AbidoodleCullen
    January 25
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    No trophies, sorry.


  • Luciferschild
    January 10

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    weird but good, i liked the rhyme scheme, i think this deserves a second look thank you for entering my contest and good luck


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    December 5, 2008

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    I like the scenario you created and shared here through your wonderful words my dear..thank you so much for such a poetry for my contest..well done..


  • pumpykin
    December 5, 2008

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    I love this, it says it's an invented form of poetry? It flows so nicely...I'm captivated both by the form and the overall message...very well done

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