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If You were Clothes.

Missing image

I bathed in years,
    waiting
to this day,
  for your touch,

how it traces my soul.

we knew
  without knowing,
      without words.


Just air filtering
       recycled,
  like me;

you said goodbye,
   and then hello


like the tear drops
of my essence,


I just cant strip you

            away;

the way you stripped me.

Author notes

30-60words
Picture Credit: "Weeping Nude" by Edvard Munch.

luna-midnight

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  • chilali
    December 14, 2008

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    Wow. This is just superb! I loved every bit of it. Thank you so much for your wonderful entry and best to you in the contest

    Much love
    Ylova


  • usefuldistraction
    December 6, 2008

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    I tend to like these confessional pieces. You have gone to a painful place and brought out something beautiful.


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    December 6, 2008
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    wow
    this was amazing
    and you ending was magnificent

    great work Steph


  • Alyzeh
    December 3, 2008

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    This was so very touching, beautiful my lovely. Your writes are wonderful.
    This was amazing..I loved your take on the prompt..Good luck in the contest to you muffin.

    Love,
    Alyzeh


  • Puppydog gold member
    December 1, 2008

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    SO HEARTFELT!!!!

    You did this picture justice! I totally agree, one who has a true heart just can't turn off their feelings.'s


  • my.stars.dont.shine
    December 1, 2008

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    Oh my gosh. This is amazing. You seriously have great talent, you need to use it more than just this poem site! Good luck in the contest. <3


  • boeing bettie
    December 1, 2008

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    Very nice piece about longing and waiting. Wishing for power to overcome the grief. Excellent job, good luck to you!


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 1, 2008

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    a harsh kind of sadness that most can't escaped, it sometimes always seems like one side can't let go of the other for a while, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    December 1, 2008

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    Fantastic are your words
    The title drew me and your poem spoke volumes
    Best wishes in the contest hun
    Julie


  • JinSays gold member
    December 1, 2008

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    Awww, I love your avatar! You're very lovely Steph.
    I love your take on this prompt too. I love the spitefulness, bitterness of your words, even thoughthey're sad, you seem to come out on top, letting this person know EXACTLY how much they hurt you.
    I wish you the best in this contest sweetheart,
    Love,
    jin


    • luna-midnight gold member
      December 1, 2008
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      awww why thank you oh so much, and sadly im sure hell never really know how much he hurt me :/
      he keeps sayin hello..and im not good at goodbye..lol


  • MysticalRayne
    December 1, 2008

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    I love this - the way you interpreted the prompt is phenomenol - best of luck hunny


  • AAA Taurus The Bull gold member
    December 1, 2008

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    Good


    Wonderful poem very well done, An excruciating and powerful piece of Poetry very well done There were no errors. Or No typos. that. I would change. I look forward to your next poem

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