I.
i cage myself in briar and barbed wire,
body and hands folded in prayer
for your free will in heaven.
i scream songs to the stars:
spread your white wings, love,
but don't forget the scarlet nights
when my tapered firefly fingers
tangled my hair into a glorious mess
and your eyes drank the cream of my skin,
remember the arch,
the curve of my back and the way
we locked together in the heat of those
sun-tea candles, diamond sweat
sparkling like victory,
we are alive.
II.
you glitter in ashes across the flowering desert
defiantly reminding us all of your radiance,
torturing me with your memory
and i wear my chains with glowing eyes
breaking my fingernails in my palms
screaming songs to the stars
in the hope that you will
stand.
Author notes
Inspiration:
"The Gaze" by Kim Davison
"Cursum Perficio" by Enya
A contest entry
- The Gaze-Kim Davison by jinsays.
1044 points, ended December 2, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - music is life by liascookin.
600 points, ended April 4, 2009, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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this is my very favorite type of poem, with contrasting words "screaming songs" and beautiful language. i'd love to be able to write like you!
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Unique
Wow. I don't like very many poems but I was in a trance with the first few sentences. Briar and Barbed wire... What a way of words. It's amazing. I applaud you.
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I especially liked the "I scream..." line...had some emotional power there... this has many facets, classic like the Trojan women [particularly the broken nails imagery] ...wrenching emotions, and softly beautiful like flowe scents in the night...you describe so well...very dramatic shifts here, very artistic...PK
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Love it
This is well written. Oh my goodness, your descriptions...fantastic..!
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i scream songs to the stars:
spread your white wings, love,
but don't forget the scarlet nights
when my tapered firefly fingers
tangled my hair into a glorious mess
and your eyes drank the cream of my skin,
WOW.
I am impressed by the heat of this write.
It's gorgeous.
Thank you for this entry, I cant really say anymore than that
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Love and best wishes,
jin
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incredible. heady passion beautifully expressed.
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