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for a moment.


i can thread through your
water-thin smile, slip and fall

into the abyss
of your clear-dark eyes, with

sunlight and midnight
in your iris

and in a second
dry acidic winds scrape us

leaving us blind.

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  • Beauty Of Silence
    December 1, 2008

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    hmm. this left me confused. you're very good at doing that i tell ya! tssh, like common! but i like the ending, sounded romantic. hahas the beginning sounded so painful and like you're being harshly treated or something, then in the end, you guys are left behind, alone... in a lonely world. hmm... wink wink with a tripple wink. keep calm charu!

    "sunlight and midnight
    in your iris"

    whoaaa... like omgosh. this is such a creative metaphor. its so beautiful, and the imagery was so powerful. overwhelming buddeh. keep writing. this is awesomely amazing, but it left me confused, just like your other poems. love ya


  • PerfectImperfection
    December 1, 2008
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    Such intense imagery here my dear... This makes me think more of being swept away, saying goodbyes, and never really being able to posses the worth you sought in another's eye. Very thought provoking. Nice write!


  • PerfectImperfection
    December 1, 2008

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    Such intense imagery here my dear... This makes me think more of being swept away, saying goodbyes, and never really being able to posses the worth you sought in another's eye. Very thought provoking. Nice write!

  • burned2d3rddegree
    December 1, 2008
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    very nice! deep and powerful!

    check out some of mine!