Surgeon's General said it BAD,
now healthy, that I mad ... ?
Sub-lime, lemon-sweet
intent ... zips ... slips
to ENCHANTRESS dream ...
Pinch ... SQUEAL ...
Smoke piggybacks oxygen trail,
twitch, TWITCH ...
triad INSIDE
pleads innocent,
but HEAD severs
inversely ...
catatonia.
Author notes
Image Inspired
Artist credit: http://michaelo.deviantart.com/art/Skin-Deep-102403749
35 words
Out of the box but in the box ... hahah Tried going into the mind of this picture and it came out with a schizophrenia-like symptom. Yes, the spacing and the way it is worded is intended. 
roflrfl
A contest entry
- 10/35/40 Quickie! by Sweet Impatience.
725 points, ended December 12, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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What a strange layout and presentation. I can see that it was intentional , though. I can definitely notice the schizophrenic nature of this piece. Interesting take on the prompt. I felt as if I was slipping into madness while reading. Well done.
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now I must say this was a very out of the box thinking.. and I knew that the spacing and the wording was intentionally. I'm not that out of touch with things you know... lol well ahh never mind, lets not go there shall we? You did an outstanding take on the prompt. I must say your choice in bg color is exceptionally blinding... though I do believe you could have made it a bit more obnoxious
good luck
kat
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The green, however, reminds me of institutional green ...
roflrfl Soooo, it had meaning too. Agreed though, the yellow should have been a bright hue of fluorescence.
tanks for da honor of gold sis ...
C C - T .... heh
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Made me think of 'Seal' there for a minute ... "We're never gonna survive unless we are a little crazy" lol!!!
An intriguing take on the prompt, with nice effect to suit. Best wishes in the contest!
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