The kitchen knife becomes inviting, as Chelsea's life is not worth fighting.
The scars run up and down her wrist, as life crumbles she hides a bloody fist.
She lies there broken with pain unspoken;
The scars she will always keep haunt yet another night of sleep.
As the drugs give him a quick high, Spencer wonders how much it will take before he dies.
He leaves the pain of reality behind, to search for what he struggles to find.
As the home he needed failed to exist, he wishes he could've lived the life he missed.
There's nothing left to the girl named Nicole, she uses anything to fill the gaping hole.
She's never had the love her heart so desperatly required;
So she wanders from guy to guy, 'cause she wants to feel desired.
As she runs away from her bitter past, she searches for a love that will last.
Ryan has nothing left to give; He begins to question the life he lives.
Inside, he's nothing but dead; He pulls the gun out and puts it to his head.
He strives for meaning, he despises his being;
He sees that all reality is pretend, he loses faith in his heart to mend.
Rachel's dreams fall through the floor; She leaves home with nothing more.
As her lifestyle has been replaced; All her fears have been faced.
Skipping meals on the streets, she struggles and fights to make ends meet.
As we sit back and watch the show, we eagerly abandon what we don't know.
We don't realize it may be to late, to save them from what will be their fate.
We say we read our Bible, we go through the motions.
We know our hymns and occasionally flip through our devotions.
We like to pretend these lives aren't really lived;
We fail to realize we do have something to give.
We have a voice, we can take a stand, to help the affliction of the broken man.
So open your eyes, so we can see; Who the people are that we were meant to b
A contest entry
- The Life You Wish You Could Have.... by gigglesalot.
800 points, ended December 16, 2008, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Honorable mention
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Gold trophy winner
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yech. i hate the way homeless people are stereotyped. It's so depressing. It's like they're doomed to an obsolete life. Your poem captured that. Nice write
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There are many in need these days. Some are addicts it's true, but many just need a hand up as they have fallen on hard times, run away from abuse or whatever. It is time to meet their eye, hear their story and find out if there is someway we can help. Even shoes or a warm blanket. Buy them a meal and sit down and talk. My son is homeless ... I know what I am asking. Thank you for entering
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This is so raw and heartbreaking. I kind of relate, in some strange way.
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so true
your words are... it is us who need to change... to step forward and help those in need. However, I asked for a prayer for the world... not a statement. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering it into my contest. -
Wow, such a powerful message and an awesome write.
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fantastic write
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how sad it is to say that I'm the perfect combo of Nicole and Chelsea. i just don't know what to say about this poem because in my mind apathy heals the edges of my pain while the hole continues to grow bigger...good luck.
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Yeah, I am too. ]=
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Great poem, I love it. Although I wish for the contest, it did have more cutting. But overall, rhyme and rythym was nicely done. Good luck, and thanks for entering
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wow....u really wrote a great poem
i loved every word there was
this is a really great piece of work
there are words that just cant explain how great this was
thankyou so much for entering my contest
good luck
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Wow, what an apt title and contribution to my contest-thank you so much
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I really can't say anything about his write that hasn't been already said.
It's awesome, touching and well penned.
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LOL you have entered this in my other contest that i have going on, so I am going to remove it from this one. if you have any others u want to enter tho feel free to do so!
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i remembered the name!!! kelly rowland! lol
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wow this is awesome! it reminds me of a song by....ugh whats her name....i cant think of it but when i do i'll let you know but everytime i hear that song it makes me cry!!! lol this poem was great i loved it.
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"The kitchen knife becomes inviting, as Chelsea's life is not worth fighting"
"As the home he needed failed to exist, he wishes he could've lived the life he missed"
"She wanders from guy to guy, 'cause she wants to feel desired"
"We like to pretend these lives aren't really lived"
"So open your eyes, so we can see; Who the people are that we were meant to be"
Amazing, fantastic, heartbreaking, I loved this poem, how it told of so many people's lifes, after the contest you are going on my favorites for sure. I love how you told of so many different people fighting, I loved so many lines that I retyped above, they were so cherishable, thank you so much for entering my contest, good luck -
Speechless. This is..awesome!! Good luck in all the contests love.
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