What was old, now is new;
A promise unaffected by what we do.
Mistakes have made us who we are;
Our evil now locked behind prison bars.
The battle with our downfalls now is won;
Light has washed away all we've done.
The Night is useless without it's stars;
Character pointless without it's scars.
One far greater than us has replaced our fear;
He prepares a place for us undimmed by tears.
To be free, we must believe;
A fufilled heart is what we recieve.
We've been set free from our prison;
All because our Savior has risen.
All our tears soothed, we live to see a brighter day;
All pain removed, we learn to let go of our old ways.
Everlasting light penetrates lingering dark;
not only in the skies, but also in our hearts.
My sins, lies, anger and hate forgiven;
to lead a better life, I now am driven.
My inspiration was that of my own life.
My trials, my victories...
I then branched it towards the reader..
The transformation from dark to light also inspired me, as it does in many of my other poems.
Thanks so much for reading!
Author notes
1) Name Angela Downs.
2) All Poetry username angeladowns.
3) Date written Fall 2008.
4) A statement giving permission for me to use the poem in a church setting.
I give you permission to read the poem in a church setting. =]
For the "26 Options" contest, I chose this quote.
ROBERT BROWNING
"I show you doubt, to prove that faith exists."
In a list
A contest entry
- change a suicidal's mind by BrittlesSkittles.
600 points, ended December 1, 2008, 24 entries
Silver trophy winner
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700 points, ended December 1, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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650 points, ended December 21, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
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800 points, ended December 19, 2008, 21 entries
Honorable mention
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Honorable mention
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What's your constructive criticisms and thoughts on my poem?
Comments
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wow..i would have never guessed you wrote this! Your style used to be so different! Great write, nonetheless.
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hahah i know it's changed sooo much.
i really appreciate you taking the time to read my stuff! :]
it means alot to me. <3
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I have to say that this is a really good poem. I enjoyed reading it.
"My sins lies, anger and hate forgiven;
to lead a better life, i am now driven."
It is wonderful what the savior has done for us al.
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I love the way you testify for Jesus Christ. This flows very nice. Great poem.
Angel
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Beautiful words you shared, shows in your heart. Well written. Blessings.
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Beautiful thoughts from your heart were poured out onto the page.
Thank you for writing this and entering it.
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You amaze me on your age, for your generation is to be the one to rise up, Keep growing in Him, this is an awesome write. Blessings.
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great testimony...of urslf and of the world and its sins...
but kindly put ur option in ur author notes...it will make things easier for me...
thanks and good luck in the contest...God bless u
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Thank you!
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We really need to be sometimes.
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nice prayer
This is a very well written and a prayer full of emotions however it is not a prayer for the world but for only yourself. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering it into this contest. -
Nice flow, it had a calmness about it. Blessings.
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I enjoyed reading your poem.
I like the rhyme.
You did a great job.
Thank you for your entry
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I enjoyed reading this. Thank you for your entry and good luck.
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I expected to read one like yours
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Thank you! =]
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great poem. Thanks for entering and good luck
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Thank you!
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I agree with you my friend..HE is very compassionate ..and our life is in HIS hands..very well made poetry here ..well done..
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Wow!
This was really an awesome poem!
I'm not the rhymer kind but I'm trying it out.
You have a gift this is a very tallented write!
I really liked your word play in this
Good luck
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Awesome poem!
Congrats on your previous wins! Well deserved! You well proved your point of faith against doubt...now if you could just help me....
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This is a really really good piece. It flowed well, and I love the message. Good Luck in the contest.
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I love see someone of your generation rise up like they are supposed to and live for the Lord...you wrote like you always had wisdom and an understanding, keep growing and writing!
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My sins, lies, anger and hate forgiven;
to lead a better life, I now am driven.
I really like this ending, thanks for entering.
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wow this is just amazing...i really enjoyed reading it. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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I did like reading this, though some of the lines were a little too long for my taste.
"The Night is useless without it's stars;
Character pointless without it's scars."
that was my favorite part =)
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Very well written..beautiful.
Great rhyme and flow.
Love your expression of faith in this poem.
Well done.
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Amazing! Everything said in this is so true ^^
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Is a thought provoking piece that lets the mind wander. Great write, good luck in the contest.
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Amazing job! I love this piece so much! Thank you for writing such a great piece with a tribute to the Savior!
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The Night is useless without it's stars;
Character pointless without it's scars.
That is my favorite part! There are so many important things to realize in this poem. Your words brought me comfort. Fantastic!
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I do hope that we live to see a brighter day.
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Love this. Love the rhyme scheme and i love the topic. Good luck
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this poem shows so much faith and beleif in ones self it is a very beutifull peice.
good luck with the contest
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This is beautiful. My favorite part is "night is useless with out it's stars; character pointless without it's scars."
Very very good. Thank you for entering!
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unlike the person's comment ahead of me. I could care less about gow many contest you entered this piece. the point is that it is very beautiful. I think it was very inspiring, it showes the true faith in believing. I loved it...
Thanks for sharing and good luck.
Justgot2loveme
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First of all. You did not list the form of poetry you used in the A/N option. this poem has also been in a ton of other contests. It was a good poem,i liked reading it. It had some good things in it,but it did not seem personal to you. It just seemed like something you thought you should write,not something that was inspired. If your poem isn't personal to you,then it doesn't feel right for this contest. make it better,and I'll reconsider.
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It was inspired, otherwise I wouldn't have wrote it.
It was very personal, I suppose looks are deceiving.
You're the first person who's ever told me this regarding this poem, out of lots of people I know personally, and people on here.
So, I suppose it's just the way you think.
It is what it is.
I'm sorry you don't think it's worthy.
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Hmm, I guess you misinterpreted promt 4. Reread it.
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hmm love the flow. great write. best of luck in this contest n in the future,
andi
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Great poem! The message was well-understood.
-->>"Everlasting light penetrates lingering dark;
not only in the skies, but also in our hearts."
It's so true. I felt as the words gave me advice and comfort, as I'm sure they will to others my age =D Good luck in the contest and thank you for entering!
~Mariah!~
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Great, important message here!
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an impactful message, one line hitting me with the next.
though this is a pre-written poem, i felt it fit perfectly with the quote stated above.
thanks for this entry (:
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wow. excellent take of existence! your rhyme scheme is lovely and the message is clearly recognizable. sometimes its beautiful when you don't mention what's wrong, but what can be right. if you believe things will fall then they will. if you believe in someone or something that can save you, then you will be saved. believing helps many cope with problems or dwell on problems. if you believe you are useless and the world is hopeless, then most likely when hope tries to find you, you will push it away. unless someone starts believing in you. and then you understand how to believe in yourself. sorry for that long rant but i really enjoyed this poem and it impacted me alot!
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theres really not much i can see that needs changed, it has good flow, rhyme, and meaning. i enjoyed it, good job
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