Weeping, broken
Falling into pieces
Darkness shines
Darkness burns
The cries of the woman
Go unheard
She is alone
Naked on the floor
She is fading
Colours are running into one
Just like her, fleeing themselves
She is beaten, she is broken
She is dying
Author notes
Written by me, Jason Smith
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie: Picture Prompt: 30-60 words. by chilali.
550 points, ended December 14, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow. A very deep write indeed. Thank you for your entry and good luck
Much love
Ylova
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Wow that was so intense
I loved the way you expressed the dark feeling of the death of a woman. I could feel the pain and saddness. Wonderful write.
LISA
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Sad and lost .. is my thoughts that river your emotions and feelings
Best wishes and good luck
Julie
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nice
that is what some one who loves some one else should write like.well done. -
this is great. flows well, and is quickly picked up fy the reader, which helps alot. i love the seeming caous to it. nicely done and take care
Stephanie ♥
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