Your stare got my attention, right now
Your scent draws to me as you come in sight
Staring at your soft, warm cheeks, so bright
Blocking me from your point of view, but how?
The monster in me, I can not allow
I want to taste you, I can't take a bite
I leave, I don't want to kill you tonight
You are trying to make me break my vow
I beware your dreams as you say my name
I realize that you are holding a key
A key to my 90 year old dead heart
You're the lamb making this lion to tame
I know, deep down, that this love can not be
But you don't care, said,' we already start'
Author notes
It's Edward's Point of view. And, I tried to write to it in the Italian Sonnet style. The rhyme scheme: abbaabba, cdecde. Hope you like it.
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Comments
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Very nice perspective of edwards thoughts.
Thnaks for entering
~Kathryn -
I like that it was from Edward's point of view; I always wonder about his thoughts seeing as the books tend to be written mainly in Bella's eyes!
You made her sound rather delectable
thanks for entering
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Oooh!!! I love it! This is amazing! Thanks for entering my contest. This is a truly wonderful write! Good luck!
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Awww i love twilight
--Janette -
This was fantastic, I really got what was going on inside Edwards Head, I really enjoyed reading it Thanks for entering my contest (:
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Great write! I loved it! It is definitely a good explanation of what was going through Edward's head when he first saw Bella.
P.S. I can't wait until Midnight Sun finally come out and get Edward's side of the Twilight story.
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This is amazing!
It really explains Edward...
I like the rhyme scheme.
Great job!
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WONDERFULL
i loved it, so far its the best one ive read, ur poem is in the contest and ill get back to u with the final results. -
nice. thank you for entering
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good job
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thanks
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nice job!!
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