my mind
is a woven patch
a blank stare
of absolution
sanity is the ink
of substance
staining walls
with invisibility
i am merely
a lining
of an over-lapping
sanctum
where
all the guests
wear white
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Gawd I love this write.
Somber. Not one to think of white in such a way, but I guess now I will.
Truly beautiful.
Love,
jin
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there is such a sense of self behind this.. sometimes self isnt strong but it usually knows itself- and this knows itself
and the poet who tells it.. wonderful little piece
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my mind
is a woven patch
a blank stare
of absolution
((( i cannot help but laugh a little- only because I know this feeling and all that is threaded behind it. I loved how you took the thread of your title and wove it into the first part of this- keeping me in the fabric of it all.)))
sanity is the ink
of substance
staining walls
with invisibility
(((right now... i can totally relate to this. A feeling to me that no one else can see but you. I just want to rip my fingers into my skull and scream sometimes!)))
i am merely
a lining
of an over-lapping
sanctum
(((the useless feeling of self - over run by those in power-- is where i went... almost like a doctor (or anyone in more power than you) is always right type of deal- and yet they are not willing to listen.)))
where
all the guests
wear white
(((and although i go medical here- because of my own medical bullshit... i visit a place of nuptuals
and well maybe that is on purpose - flipping it so the the guests wear white and then i also think of something i told the doctor the other day in a fit of controlled rage--- he is a guest in my room-- i pay him, he works for me lol....
and i sit looking still like a crazy woman
something about wearing white... not as innocent as origionally thought- was my first thought...eh..now i am not making any sense anymore lol.. forgive.
I am not sure what this all was to you personally- but to me it went a few different places but had the same bottom line of almost pathetic- like frustration.
I really loved this. You always have a way with your words that show me feelings and situations within myself that go several directions. Thank you for entering our contest.)))
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Love the ending, fo' sho'. Hell, I'd know ya anywhere, my Friend. You'd be the one wearin' shades & a lopsided grin. 
Good luck in Mary's contest, Scribe. 
Wanderer
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Wonderful write.
I love the last stanza in particular, but then again I loved all of it!
Kudos, job well done.
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Holy mother of electricity (Edison?)
This had such amazing flow without punctuation; you have me going
over how good it is.
The first & last stanzas were my favorite in particular.
'absolution' AHHH I freaking love the word and its meaning and obviously, the way you used it.
'overlapping' <==this is a word w/o a hyphen...unless you wanted to intentionally separate it like that? I think the word works nicely with the patch mentioned in S1.
"where
all the guests
wear white"
Holy crap ass that was genius.
Seriously, it made me think of a really sterilized room with lab coats without senses of humor.
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Jessica
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