Our love was molten,
searing flesh with pleasure’s heat.
Too soon, the coldness came
and the ashes of loneliness
coated my existence.
Now I am just a frozen
memory, sealed forever
in time…
Author notes
I remember seeing pictures of people trapped in Pompeii, turned to stone where they lay… this reminded me of those pictures.
Prompt: Picture
Picture Credit: http://photodream.deviantart.com/art/Hiding-104203807
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A contest entry
- TIme For A PIF Quickie! You Bored? by Sweet Impatience.
875 points, ended December 2, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
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Oh VERY good, I really like this!!!
Well done.
A fabulous take on the prompt.
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this is an excellent take on the prompt. A sad one though.. such a tragic event that occurred. the emotions that were felt as I read this were extremely powerful & strong.
the imagery quite dark and vivid, raw and powerful.
good luck
kat
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Nice way to weave a historical tragedy in with raw and deep emotion. Two images I remember seeing in school were two lovers, spooning and a mother, curled up into the wall, trying to shield her child....such love, truly frozen in time. Nicely done. Best of luck to you in this contest.
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Awesome
I remember studying this very topic in History
Your words being the tragedy to the for front
Best wishes to you
Julie
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Now this I can relate to. something emotional and yet it has a certain history to it as well.. you really did a wonderful job with this write.. Bookmarked!
Best of luck in the contest.
Angel
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"sealed forever in time" I really like this piece...i think you did a great job with the prompt
good luck
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A wonderful write here as usual! You really used the prompt so well here and I liked it. Good luck in the contest
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