I hate that you are critical
With words harsh and blunt
You’re naive, too political
I despise you’re stupid grunt
I detest that you ignore me
When I struggle to discuss us
You nod your head, to simply agree
To avoid the dispute and fuss
I’m repulsed by the way you drink
You alter, becoming someone I don’t know
I can’t bear the way you seductively wink
When you tell a woman, hello
I hate you’re corrupted smirk
Your foolish choice of attire
You’re never angry, try berserk
And you’ve became such a fit liar
You see, I hate it
The words you speak
The life you seek
The terms you say
The things you do…
But most significantly
Main importantly
I hate the way
I’m undyingly
in love with you.
Author notes
I was told that this poem could be bettered so I sat down and tried my best to improve it and actually liked the outcome of it. If you agree that this one was better then the other, you can delete the other "Hate" poem I have entered. Thankyou!
A contest entry
- Pissed Love by Hateful Apathy.
2200 points, ended December 14, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be honest :D
Comments
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So, so sorry that I, nor one of my fellow judges have commented this yet. I actually liked this one, and the original. Keep up the writing. Once again, sorry.
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