Nothing more than
cardboard floors
and no colour
anywhere to see.
Nothing but a mural
of blank shades of nothing
Swirling around pointlessly
for show.
Everything's like a
birds cage preventing
the sweet sound of
music to enlighten the dullness.
Everything carved in
stone, motionless.
Petrified.
Dead.
Author notes
Picture credit:: http://photodream.deviantart.com/art/Hiding-104203807
A contest entry
- TIme For A PIF Quickie! You Bored? by Sweet Impatience.
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Comments
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This is beautiful and dark and I loved it!
I like the back button comment as well XDD nice!
The bird cage part is completely awesome...sorry, I'm no good at giving decent critiques
--Pet
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I think that you did a nice job with this sweetie I love the background good luck in the contest be well.
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Well versed and deep
The feelings flow
Best wishes and good luck
Julie
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I found your take on this prompt to be very deep, thought provoking also. I really love the third stanza, that's my favorite. You've done an excellent job with both the prompt and your poem.
good luck
kat
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wow...this is a powerful write. I really like the metaphors used in this piece..great take on the prompt and good luck
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Thank you very much ^^
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my goodness what an amazing take on the picture Its depth is just right
Best of luck in the contest
Delila
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Thank you
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Wow ...
somebody dug deep into this prompt, sis
Well done ... a powerful poem with great imagery.
Good luck in the contest -- I'm sure you'll score high
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I love the background, too --- is it your own?
Love,
Zach -
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Thank you again ^^
It's the first time in a while I've written like this.
And yep the backgrounds mine
Might put it up for use ^^
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