It was like poetry
That evening with you and me
The sun sank
As we sat by the riverbank
Birds sang
Where the apples hang
We were happy, you and me
There wasn't any worry,
Not that we could see
Every moment was bliss
Every promise sealed with a kiss
My hand in yours,
Together we would be forever more
Author notes
This piece was inspired by a memory of how I felt about my first love and how I imagined every perfect evening with him would be. We were young...
♥ Kathraina
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the images and flow of the piece really capture the tranquil, fluid, wonderful feel of love's initial aspect.
thanks and good luck in the contest.
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sweet memories, how love blossoms like the first of spring, and how it blooms into something beautiful...great write...
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I can relate to that perfectly. I felt much of the same thing about my first love and that kind of feeling sticks with you forever in your memories.
Great job of capturing that in your words!
Good job, good luck, and keep up the great writing!
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short, sweet and innocent. its nice and loving, but i need something different. dont get me wrong i really do like it. but yeh lol thank you and good luck
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A painted picture of every relationship when it starts of sweet. loving it!
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This is beautiful, I love it
I love the rhyme scheme, it flows so nicely ^^ Good luck in the contest
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It was like poetry
That evening with you and me
Lovely. The whole poem gives me such a sense of calm and contentedness and serenity when I read it. -
Oh I've already commented on this lol x Good luck in the contest hun xx
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Aaawww its beautiful hun. Such a perfect moment in time x Brings back a few very happy memories, thank you for that x
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Such warmth and Love!
Romantic, sentimental, scenic.."every moment was bliss" You paint a lovely picture...everything vivid. A wonderful write!
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This is a beautiful, heartfelt write. It could warm the soul on the dreariest of days. Thank you for sharing.
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