Fragrant petals adrift
tranquil streams of calm
Basking in silent shadows
of clandestine brilliance
Wading like holy rollers
in sanctified glory
Giving praise to the
heavenly host
Arrayed in garments
of Lily white
Author notes
Poem inspired by picture on link below
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2428933
The reflections of this piece is
purely personal.
In that the image given reminds me
of a purity and sacredness like that
of worship.
I hope you enjoyed it
A contest entry
- white by Cat.
2200 points, ended December 9, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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boy oh boy.. i haven't heard the term holy rollers since the 70's... so fun to
see it pop up here in this white robed poem-
and yes, i can see the robes
and the rollers hands held to the sky
and the word jesus repeated over
and over again
nicely done- thanks so much
m
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Adonai
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(((Before getting into the poem I would like to write about your title and author notes. I almost felt going off the title alone sarcasm... I think leaving the ! out would give more of a sacred feel- I understand you want the power but trust your words of the poem to carry that through.
Just like I mentioned... trust your words to carry through the purity and sacredness... trust that I the reader 'get it'- even if its in my own way...
telling me kind of takes the enjoyment out of the whole concept. Trust that you are good enough to put forth what you mean.)))
Fragrant petals adrift
tranquil streams of calm
Basking in silent shadows
of clandestine brilliance
(((precious serenity to me.. basking in silent shadows- the strongest part and does so make me know exactly how you want this piece taken-- i almost see myself kneeling and praying while a single light shines upon the top of my bowed head)))
Wading like holy rollers
in sanctified glory
Giving praise to the
heavenly host
Arrayed in garments
of Lily white
((( and i am correct in my feeling from the wading and giving praise... your use of lily reminds me of my grandmother... she would say 'the lily truth'
lovely poem and put together very nicely. Thank you so much for taking the time to enter into our contest)))
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wow
another good one nice great write
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Your words are indeed uplifting and praiseworthy. I easily see the purity in your tone of voice here, and your level of committment. A very beautiful work of imagery and expert word usage. I feel all warm inside. I wish you well in the challenge.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Your piety stands in amazing awe of our FATHER in heaven....this is just beautiful how you painted this picture of HIS Purity & Holiness....excellentNovy
JUST ADORABLE
Happy Holidays
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aww this is so beautiful!!! You portrayed this so well!!! Wow its so lovely!!!! This is absolutely amazing so truly fantastic!!! My words can't express this is wonderful!!1 I love it!!
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Wonderful. Well done.
This is a very uplifting poem without any soppiness or drama. I am surprised because it is different than many of your writes.
It amazes me how you got such words of wisdom from that simple picture and how you have transformed it into something beautiful.
The only thing I question is the exclamation mark. I found it misleading in the title.
Magnificent poem.
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A wonderful write here hon and I enjoyed reading this very much! Good luck in the contest
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Lovely
Basking in silent shadows
of clandestine brilliance
^_^ those lines were my favorite
Bravo -
This poem is loaded with beautiful imagery that overwhelms the senses.
I love this poem. It's very beautiful, and surely a top contender in this contest. I wish you the best of luck.
In His Love,
Zach -
That sounds so beautiful. :]
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exalting!
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