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Passion

Inside my flesh I can hear
our fingers touch,
my cracking bones the memories
of universe’s creation.
Sounds of static assail me
like the ardent red of autumn and the rose of hips
and the sweetness of golden orange
on my tongue and lips.

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  • Nicolette gold member
    December 5, 2008

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    i agree with Guy about the artistry in this poem, Sonja. it almost feels like i'm reading a painting.. your use of colour in poetry is so great and in this poem you allow the reader to indulge all the senses

    i also liked the sounds here. the "rose of hips" is one of my favourite phrases and images. as always, your poetry comes with a soft but authentic voice...something i admire so much!

    thank you for sharing this lovely entry with us in the contest.

    ~ Nicolette

  • grm
    December 5, 2008

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    love the artistry of this piece...its thoughts and emotions, as well as its colour palate

    to be in love, is to be art

    thank you for this colourful entry


  • Ellis gold member
    December 4, 2008
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    Interesting

    I think this is going on inside your head (your imagination).


  • Room without doors gold member
    December 2, 2008

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    Outstanding

    This poem is full of vivid imagery. I liked your choice of language and the way this poem hints at romance and leaves the reader wanting to read more. This poem has a wonderful simplicity and great flow. Best of luck in the contest.

  • tara wilson gold member
    November 30, 2008

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    this is such beautiful passion you paint here in this poem..Sonja, very well done, best of luck=)


    • Sonja
      December 1, 2008
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      Dear Tara... well now I stumbled to words I want to use. Would a simple thank you be enough?
      ~Sonja~


  • Wandika gold member
    November 30, 2008
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    Beautiful Sonja

    I love to read your accent. It is much more sutle from when you first wrote.

    • Sonja
      December 1, 2008
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      I am far of the language knowledge I want. I am only trying to dy my best.
      By the way, was that supposed to be Beautiful Sonja or Beautiful, Sonja. I think there is some differences between its meaning, lol. Thank you for your always kind comments, poetical and friendly support.
      ~Sonja~

      • Wandika gold member
        December 1, 2008

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        I have always

        found both to be true. For from your writings your true beauty has shown through. I love your accent. Makes for a better read.

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