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My Heart

Here I lay in a cloak.
Dark as night, Freezing as ice.
No one to be seen for miles.
My heart's clutched to my ribs.
I shriek in pain, but no tear is seen.

I drift into a sleepless night.
Waiting for him to bring light.
I vowe not to be broken anymore.
I walk slowly through the dark.
My heart sending me down.

Killing Me, Killing Him.
It makes no sense.
Die slowly, pain increased.
Cry tonight, not seen tomorrow.
My heart will not be released.

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  • Raw and powerful emotional delivery is brought out of this poem

    well penned