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Forgiving


Inspired by 'Prayer for Forgiving' by MargaretG
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4801131


Thought-provoking indeed! You were TOLD you had to forgive?
Incredible gall!  But then, I was not the victim here.  But
we must be thankful too, for there was a great poem in it--a
gift she had not intended, I'm sure.  And your message is
prime!

In fact, two poems. Mine too.


There is irony in the fact
that the very best of us,
least deserving, attacked,
find here the most serious
challenge to our identity,
including well-being, health
and happiness. Indignity,
product of enemy stealth.

Remember that the enemy
undeserved by the benign,
self-consumed, will surely
be harmed more by design,
remaining soul-guilty
throughout eternity.

 
  Pseudo-Petrarchan Thoughts

  No pentameters here, or metre, but that was inspired --as so often seems to happen, by yours.  In fact, almost all my poems come this way! 

If I were the one attacked, would my anger permit poetry?
The soft answer that "turneth away wrath" has, in my experience, induced repeated attacks.  Calloused, they become a waste of time.
Seems to me, I must take lessons in forgiving!

Excellent experience!

Terry

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  • HammeR
    December 30, 2008

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    I had to read through this write a few times as my mind rebelled at this style and was like a one legged man in a butt kicking contest trying to grasp its structure. As I found the message by analysing each line I started to think that forgiveness is not for the attacker but for the most part for the one that has been harmed as it adds peace to a mournful soul.

    I do believe that you portray a persistant fundamental rule that one shall be hung by thier own tongue.

    Thank you for sharing this write Terry. I try to remain humble in life but have in the past been prideful warranting a guilty plea. This is a great reminder to myself.

    Yes I have been inspired on more than one occasion by reading what others have written.


  • MargaretG
    November 30, 2008

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    Whatever you say about yourself

    there will be someone to test if it is hypocritical or real. While I don't want conflict, those who seek it have their place, and it is their own responsibility what the final outcome of it will be.

    It is good to see inspiration going around, that is far better than the usual pecking order. Your vocabulary is outstanding, and the form carries your ideas well. Thanks for the consideration and poetic response to my poem.


    • Terry-too silver member
      December 3, 2008
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      Consider it a pleasure, especially when they are self-propelled! Where would I be without inspiration?

      Terry


  • albymyheart gold member
    November 30, 2008

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    Well worded to express your thoughts on the effects on both parties when people attack us without good reason. I liked your last four lines the best, descibing the natural law of "pay back" without the emotion of resentment. Cause and effect... an apt idea for a Pseudo-Petrarchan style poem dividing the thoughts into two stanzas. It flows well without strict adherence to meter and that, I think, is the main thing in a poem of this non-conformist style. Very good...alby


    • Terry-too silver member
      December 3, 2008
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      It is great to have it read by someone who understands what happens in Petrarchan form! Thank you alby!


  • Matt Holck
    November 30, 2008
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    it flows very well
    and the guilty do have to carry their contridictions


    • Terry-too silver member
      November 30, 2008
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      Yes, and a good thing, too!! Thanks, Matt

    • Terry-too silver member
      November 30, 2008
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      Alby, Thank you !

      Excellent commentary alby, noticing things many would not, like the change of topic in the smaller verse. The lines you liked came entirely from my muse. I was happy to see them too, much better than what I might have written on my own!

      Terry
      PS, I wish the comment would STAY where it belonged!


      • Matt Holck
        November 30, 2008
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        you might want to hit the reply under Alby
        so she gets the note


        • Terry-too silver member
          December 1, 2008
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          I tried and it did not work, but I guess that's why it wandered?


      • Matt Holck
        November 30, 2008
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        I smiled when I heard your reply
        Oh that Terry and her muse

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