I was once a Santa Clause,
And scratched around like a cat with paws.
I turned into Jingle Bells,
And had to say that Batman smells.
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I tried to make a clarihew thingy. Did I do okay?
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This is a cute poem
I like the way that you have added in the traditional humour of the "batman smells" line from the parody - this is a very good attempt at a clerihew!
Merry Christmas!
Polly
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I like this. It made me smile 
I see that Matske explained that it is not quite a clerihew but if you just change the second line to something Santa does, for example
"I was once a Santa Clause
Making lots of magic laws"
then it would fit the form..but I think with a little revision this could be brilliant. It has lots of potential and I think you did great
Good luck! 
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A very nice little poem, but it's not a "clerihew".
An example of a clerihew is:
Our art teacher, Mr. Shaw,
Really knows how to draw.
But his awful paintings
Have caused many faintings.
Rules:
The first line has to end with a person's name (Mr. Shaw - could be Santa Claus).
The second line has to tell us what he does (he knows how to draw)
The third and fourth line can be anything, but they have to rhyme.
Have a look again and change some things. I am sure you can do it. Good luck!
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thanks. your comment helps. i guess i didn't understand. thanks for explaining it.
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