in an ocean of stars
a ballet sun pirouettes
alone in a glimmering sea
of waltzing partners
in an ocean of light
waves wash the empty shores
of a trillion winkling eyes
an island of contemplation
mass gave light to motion
birth gave life to mind
thought gave dream to atoms
form gave way to karma
by the river of no return
a solitary observer
breathes in the emptiness
steam rising to nowhere
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I love the mix of scientific and spiritual language
there are a few superfluous "the"s
second to last line: the emptiness
second stanza second line: the empty
I really like it
not enlightened, but closer for having read this -
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Well neither am I enlightened. But I understand that it is only through contemplation that we stand a chance at it. And so I contemplated here, in a loose sort of verse.
Glad you enjoyed.
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i LOVE THIS poem the images are amazing i really love the part: in an ocean of stars
a ballet sun pirouettes
alone in a glimmering sea
of waltzing partners
that's so BEAUTIFUL gud job -
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Thanks bribri
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Interesting... it is a very peaceful and kind read. I was a bit confused by the last verse because the rest of it seemed at peace with everything and has sort of a "let it be" attitude. But to me, the "river of no return" and "steam rising to nowhere" invoke a more unpleasant tone. But oh well...what do I know?
I found this to be extremely well written with an abundance of thought provoking imagery. I am glad I mused my way to this spot on this day.
Write on, poet.
Blessings,
Myth
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I'm curious. What about the final stanza had an unpleasant tone to it to you? The Buddha taught that who becomes enlightened doesn't come back--is free from karma. He referred to such beings as "non-returners". And yet we must stream (the river) clear to our last mortal breath, or final moment of karma. But who is free and destined not to return is then on that stream to no-return--the river of no return. He has become at peace with all, and realizes the transitoriness of ego, the self-perceived self. It's evaporating every moment like steam from the breath on a cold moonlight night.
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Thanks for the beautiful reply! And as one who has not studied Buddha or his teachings your answer explains my question.
I was simply bringing "what I know" to your poem. And as I said in the comment, "river of no return" and "steam rising to nowhere" rang hollow with me because I did not have an understanding of the 'religious experience' of reaching the final moment of karma and what that entails.
I figured it had an explanation because I ended the comment with "..what do I know?"
Thank you for your reply and explanation.
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Superb
A very fine write, indeed. You have expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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My pleasure! Glad you enjoyed.
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