Dear flower, why must you wilt so?
Do you know the sun shines for you today?
She looked at me, and smiled so
Told me quietly that
There's a certain beauty
Unseen by the naked eye
It is only felt
Unseen beauty, it's only felt
This got me thinking
I'm a beauty, that can't be seen
Because of scarred up arms
And an imperfect face
No one comes out to tell me
Amanda you're pretty
Amanda you're gorgeous
Amanda please smile, we promise tomorrow will be better
Am I just walking around merely existing?
Is this really just a dream?
And will my dreams come true ever?
I feel as though this world is empty,
Nothing to help, nothing to save you
They tell me that this pain is real...
It's part of existing, and it's part of life
They say it's okay that you're hurting
But I know the truth
It's blocking the beauty, to be seen
It's covering my body, like a deep dark shadow
And it's haunting me every day
Because really, this emotion is ready to drive you insane
But worst of all
It's hiding beauty
My beauty
And it's being left unseen
It's covering up the inside
And worst of all
It's hiding the beauty within
it's hiding the beauty of
Love
And it's hiding the beauty
We once carried in our hearts
Author notes
2) A few titles to get you started
3) Finish the poem
4) Phrases.
8) Word Bank! (thinking, tomorrow, empty, nothing, hurting
I like a challenge 
Username: all that ive got
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If I can't do more than one option, I can change it around, just ask. I just like using more than one usually 
I like challenging myself while I write.
A contest entry
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Comments
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I'm glad you did more than one. It adds to it, certainly, and challenging yourself is a great way to get better, is it not? It challenges the muse. I enjoy challenges as well.
I like the idea you have with this piece. It's like giving hope to those who are wearing their pain... much like a friend of mine... It makes it difficult to see their beauty, though there are some of us who can see it but just can't bring it out. Thank you for this.
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I can relate to what you say here and in a lot of cases you are so correct. There is pain in life, but it should not all be that way. I see so many voices that have been silenced and that is a bad thing. I like your write and wish you luck in the contest, but more so in releasing more of you inner beauty in words! the Shaker
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interesting style towards the end there. Just like the poem its making you think differently. You seem to know a lot about unseen beauty in a lot of things. As well as truth:
"Am I just walking around merely existing?
Is this really just a dream?"
Sometimes truth does cover the beauty in the world. Not everything is so bad. Yes, life goes on and we suffer here and there, some more than others, but the whole experience of life should be a beautiful thing. Whether we see it as a dream or not, shouldnt it be pleasent either way?
Wonderfully written as well.
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Thank you so much
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