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Before The World Died

You should have seen the world before it died
With lush green mountains where rivers flow free
When stunning dawns and glorious sunsets vied
With cloudy blue skies and emerald seas

Then man, in his quest for wealth destroyed
Himself and all that nature has to give
Greed pervades with humanity devoid
Ignoring pleas to let the old ways live

Power corrupts and drives us all to war
Murderous violence and mayhem ensue
Nuclear weapons pound this world to its core
Insanity that we would one day rue

Hey, have you seen the world before it died
Can you feel our grief or know why we cried



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If you sonnet does not begin with "You should have seen the world before it died" it would be dsq.

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  • Symphony
    March 28

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    Too true, too very true -

    Every word here is so wise and full of truth, yet many will ignore them, or shrug off the responsibility of bearing them.

    Very well written, congrats on the previous trophy.


  • Summer52
    December 6, 2008
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    Simply beautiful sonnet, Lee.

    Congrats on this Bronze.

    summer51


    • Lee Tai Wah
      December 6, 2008
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      Hi summer

      Ha, ha. This is the only one I wrote that is recognized as a sonnet. So how is your sonnet class?


      • Summer52
        December 6, 2008
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        The form is SONNET...though .

        NO REPLY from my "teacher." I have 2 classes but no reply from both...maybe I'm not really good and they get bored to all the assignments I submitted.

        I'll just post my only sonnet here when it's finish. It's my MASTERPIECE.

        summer51


        • Lee Tai Wah
          December 6, 2008
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          Hi summer

          For some, any poem with 14 lines is a sonnet. Some are not bothered whether it is a pentameter, some don't care whether it is iambic. My teacher said it does not have to be completely iambic-that would make it boring. Actually I quite agree. It is what we want to write that is important so rules can be relaxed a little. If I think that it is important, I am not really bothered if it is 11 syllables instead of 10. But when you are doing class assignments, then it is a different story.
          Why don't you message them? Anyway, I will be waiting for your masterpiece.


          • Summer52
            December 6, 2008
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            Next year... I will post it. A triple-sonnet. That's why too long to finish. The title: LOVE IS ALL I ASK OF YOU. Hahaha!

            Wait for that...

            summer51


            • Lee Tai Wah
              December 6, 2008
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              Hi summer

              A triple-sonnet? Haven't heard of it? Is it 3 x 14 lines? OMG, love again. For you young people, it is always love.


              • Summer52
                December 6, 2008

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                Well, isn't sonnet all about LOVE?

                It's triple-sonnet rhymed cuz it's 2 stanzas with 20 lines each and a couplet. All in all 42 lines ( 3 x 14= 42).

                It's my own form and I will call it... LuzSonnet.


                summer51


  • Titus gold member
    November 30, 2008

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    how you turn the good to bad, (volta) when, "Power corrupts and drives us all to war / Murderous violence and mayhem ensue," finally calming the verse with couplet. nice work.

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