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Oozing Rain Falls Die

Oozing rain falls die
cast plans failing and
I remember it had icons
the old windshield wipers
rhythmic spinsters voting
quietly behind dusty curtains
the same coddling candidate
they voted for 27 years ago
their minds expand oozing
falls die determined
because now
has a strong foundation
("occupational hazzard...")
a simple deception
against commented
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  • ToMagnify
    December 16, 2008
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    I like!

    I like the direction you've taken wihthis poem. Keep doing it. Feels free. Refreshing.