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Silence

Gone, you've  taken your light
I lay awake night after night

You're not coming back it's clear
Fulfilling completely my darkest fear

Remembering how you stood out in the crowd
Now its so quiet
Even the silence is too loud

Author notes

prompt silence ...this for my daughter Delia

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  • ratkos
    December 1, 2008
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    Thank you all for your lovely comments....i hope so too... jenn


  • chilali
    December 1, 2008

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    Aww. She's very pretty, just like you are I loved the beauty of this poem. So sad and the tone was very serene. You did very well. I hope things work out between the two of you Thank you for your entry and good luck.

    Much love
    Ylova


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    November 30, 2008

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    aaw jenn... i sense your pain all too deeply. She looks like you and I am sure that what you have taught her will resurface and your daughter will become your best friend

    becca


  • Ken-Maverick
    November 30, 2008

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    JUDGED!!

    I feel the sadness in this write seeping through each line i read.
    Things will work out in the end, i'm sure
    afterall she is your daughter
    Well penned

    All the best to you and thanks for the entry

    Ken