Oh God
startlingly I think, I am brain-sick
and double minded
by the love making which makes me timeless
annexing me towards the personal
of your realm
yet the reasoning
which belongs to her
did not reciprocate to my core
making me not to identify her
as even my own woman
Oh God...
Author notes
This is about the unpredictable mood of my beautiful woman while NOT responding my proposal of love making.
Picture prompt ~ Pic by Atra-Virago
- http://atra-virago.deviantart.com/art/Untitled-71748084
A contest entry
- Semi-Quicki - Picture Prompt (Untitled) by Catie Sheeran.
550 points, ended December 5, 2008, 3 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
hGod...
Comments
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A lovely write. For me, I got the impression of intimate moods
I imagine that there are a lot of peole out there who think too deeply about an intimate moment and, rather than finding a deeper appriciation, find themselves ruining it.
I suppose too, that the search for constant reciprocated fire in intimacy might have something to do with promiscuity too.
I really don't think the intensity of lovemaking has a lot to do with how much we're loved or how cherished we are. The occasional clash of flames will happen and everything in between a step nearer a meeting of soul.
Just rambling opinions. A beautiful write all the same.
s and best wishes always... ~Genie~
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Terrific writing
Like this poem very much! Many men have this happen.
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this is very unique
I really enjoyed this read...great take on the prompt!!
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I have to agree with Hikari Lady's explanation. I'd like to add that I think you'd be better not to add Autors Notes because, for me, this confused the beauty of what I got out of your piece. Just a thought. Good luck to you
~Mary O
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Sorry,
I am so in your face. Woman and Man. Such a difficulty. We are one, yet "not the same".
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This poem is kind of confusing because it holds two sides of life. The one that's full of lust and love for life and the one wich declines all beauty and mortale things in life. Simply wonderful, you never cease to amaze me with your wording, do you?
Best of luck in the contest.
Much love
~Noor
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It is rough sometimes, for sure, your poem captures that fact lol and good luck in the contest
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''the love making which makes me timeless?''
are you seriously timeless?
It's a beautiful poem and that one line seemed to add extra sweetness. (Oh I hope I don't sound perverted
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