Oh God
what else can I do
except to write a prayer
portraying to you
that I belong to you
I wish sometimes
you should also make me sense
as the reply of my words
teaching to me
that you too belongs to me
Oh God...
In a list
A contest entry
- I feel so alive by samantha jean.
1200 points, ended December 13, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I thought that lines 6-8 are always a part of my personal feelings of God. I enjoyed that particular part. There is that constant struggle that God and Mankind face daily. Prayers are a personal enjoyment and always needed. I loved the picture you added to this poem. I am so sorry that you did not win this competion. I also thought that "teaching to me" was a good title and also how you brought it in the poem was great. I truely believe that you brought out some inspiration to me from lines 7-10, I am also thiking about a time when I was young and prayed my heart out for a chance to have a young child but I found out that I was unable to due to infierilty i couldn't and this is exactly how felt God didn't answer me and this poem shows exactly how I felt. Thank you for writting this nice work of art.
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Universal feelings are here. We all want to feel the return of love and affection. And the life portrayed within your words-just a pleasure to read. Peace, Rhonda
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Excellent writing
Feeling love growing through time is us feeling God.
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A prayer directly from the soul... what can one say but be grateful that it is shared. Such a personal tribute to the love of our Lord is so touching. Thank you for sharing this with us all.
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What a wonderful show of reaching out and a beckoning for Love's return. Makes me feel a time when I realised now matter how old I was, I still loved to have my Mom or Dad's approval.
Nicely done,
~Mary O
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"what else can I do
except to write a prayer
portraying to you
that I belong to you" - I really like the first stanza because it's very matter-of-fact. Like, there is nothing else in the world that you would dream to write about for this contest.
Good write, thank you for entering, and good luck in my contest. -
Well written and very moving. I can relate to this poem.
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