With Metropolis free of crime
not a criminal left in sight
with boredom setting in
and a desire, to still do right.
He raised his moral standards
and couldn’t believe what he saw
White-collar criminals were plentiful
and they were still, breaking the law.
But Superman was jaded
crime’s filth turned him dark
he couldn’t tell the difference
between a guppie, or shark.
White collar criminals
can be so hard to find
looking like, the good guys
made, Superman blind.
With much, anticipated remorse
and a soulful tear in his eye
I’ll just, kill all that are wearing
a three piece suit and a tie.
From sky scraper, to sky scraper
on his merry way, did he go
from screams, of the death cries
their lifes blood, began to flow.
Pulling off their ties
he also grabbed their spine
their life squirted like grapes
turning them into, blood wine.
Blood dripping, high atop a bridge
Superman watched the sun set
laughing as their sticky lives dried
thinking, bridges are slippery when wet!
Author notes
4. Superman
In a list
A contest entry
- TwIsTeD DeMenTeD FaIrYtAlEs; ROUND 2: SuPeR HeRo'S GoN' MaD!! by Still Standing.
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Bronze trophy winner
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I can totally see it happening!
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Very nicely done.It's pretty cool the way you twisted the line between good and evil in superman's eyes.
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You really twisted Superman's cape around with this one. Really quite clever and a pleasure to read. Best of luck, and tahnks for entering.
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funny and demented!
A unique take on the greatest of superheroes, Superman. I hope he never goes off his rocker like this.
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I liked this tale very much especially the ripping out the spine.LOL Great job and good luck in the contest. Jo-Ann
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Ah, blood wine, breakfast of Klingons. Yes, superman against the yuppy villains, but I think it wouild be Chablis they bled. What we really need today is a good workin' class hero.
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Good Job!
and you would be corret luna!!!!! I love it, tearing the spines off white collar criminals shouldn't that be legal...oh how I wish it were!!! Good job and great take on superman
PS Change thier to their in the next to last stanza
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made them into blood wine*
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those are the only 2 i found.. otherwise, it's all good and i think that mr. nookie would like it.. -
not too sure about some of the wording in this one but i do think that you put good effort in to writing it. squirting like grapes, kinda made me laugh and gave me a stomach turning image at the same time....just some thoughts.
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