Humpty Dumpty sat on the wall,
Humpty Dumpty had a great fall,
all the kings horses and all the kings men.
couldn't put Humpty together again
A great nursery rhyme was that,
how if broken they try to make you hole again,
how if you have fallen down in life,
you are helped by fellow men.
Picking up shattered pieces of
once was a fantastic life,
but humpty jumped from the wall,
once he found out another egg was screwing his wife.
Nobody can heal a broken heart,
once you have given your heart away,
you just fine a new way to deal with the pain,
as you go on living another day.
You can try and love again you might,
be able to forget it all,
for some its like the end of the world,
his perfect life began to fall.
He trusted her with anything,
told her things that haunt his life day by day,
she said he could trust her,
the words he said she would never say.
A family they were going to start,
Humpty was full of pride,
but something was the matter with Mrs Dumpty,
she did not feel the same joy inside.
Soon the day would come,
another little egg would be brought to the world,
but that would be to perfect a life,
a problem would be unfurled.
Mrs Dumpty lost baby egg,
Humpty cried for it to be a bad dream,
were he wanted to cry out why god why?
I guess he never herd his scream.
Humptys's life went from bad to worse,
he later found out his wife was a cheat,
this is when Humpty sat on the wall,
and admitted to defeat.
I will now tell you the nursery rhythm,
the way it should be told,
the answers I will leave to you readers,
let them in your own mind unfold.
Humpty Dumpty sat on the wall,
looking to end his own life,
Humpty Dumpty need a good mate,
but they were busy fucking his wife.
Humpty Dumpty pushed forward,
he began to fall to the ground,
he looked for answer to why in life,
death was the only one he found.
Humpty lays in a mess,
shattered all over the place,
the kings men arrived on the seen
with puzzled looks upon there face.
Try as they did to save him,
his life was just not meant to be,
a husband who gave his love to his wife,
but she never gave it back to he.....
Author notes
This is one of the most tripped out writes I thin I ever wrote but for some reason it just flowed natural for me so I thought before I forget write it down see what other think I would love to know.
Please tell me what you think
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Its a very interesting twist to one of my favorite nursery rhymes!!! You are very good with your poems they flow very nice! I agree with Amykinzy its really hard to know whether your are supposed to laugh or to feel sad, its just such an interesting twist. Awesome poem! throughly enjoyed it!
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I don't know if I should be laughing or crying right now lol the whole concept is comical but at the same time heartbreaking, it brought both a smile to my face and a sad feeling to my heart, poor humpty
eg. whats actually being said here is gutting, but the shock value of how you say it makes me smile
Humpty Dumpty sat on the wall,
looking to end his own life,
Humpty Dumpty need a good mate,
but they were busy fucking his wife.
But can I just put a word in for mrs Dumpty, for all what she did was very wrong (and I can't believe I went through my childhood not knowing the truth!!) maybe she had her reasons, there are 2 sides to every story, maybe she just didn't love him the way one egg should love another, maybe behind closed doors he beat her? or maybe Humpty's friends took advantage when she was feeling low because Humpty didn't give her the attention she deserved?
I'm by no means making allowances for the whore, I'm just saying we should keep an open mind on this.
I love thisl, I think you should do more of them!!
like the animal cruelty behind mary dragging that little lamb around with her when it should have been grazing in a field with its flock
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how very clever, l love the way you use the nursery rhyme, gives the poem a child like quality, its awsome, i tried the same thing once, with little success, the way you tell this story is brutally frank, and very sad and bautifully done
thanks
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I enjoyed reading this. Although it's a sad story, the way you've linked it inot Humpty Dumpty was really clever. The conparisons and metaphors are really clever.
Heartbreak is an undescribable feeling, yet you've done a good job here.
Great write, I hope things are looking a bit better for you now.
Anna
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Amazing Poem
Well James I think this is one of your best. It is amazing from begining to end. So sad but writen so well!!! It is a nursery rhyme but so true to real life too. So sorry you had to go through the sadness of someone breaking your heart. Hugs for my dear son.
Love You,
Mum
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This is excellent. I kinda thought it would another poem making fun of the rhyme but this surprised me. Amazing...
Lae, Le Déchaîné Feu Tempète xx
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Incredible Poem!
When I read the title hun I thought it was going to be another parody type write; and it is, only this is a heartbreaking one
I am incredibly impressed with the poetic metaphors and strength in this darlin. You took a silly little nursery rhyme and created a write of truth and pain very well.
You are strong hun, and deserve better then all of that
Keep writing hun! I love reading your words!
♥
Stay safe
Love ya
~Manda
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I like your take on humpty's story, but I think that this would be better if you kept the same rhyme scheme as the nursery rhyme. I think it would make it flow a little better
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This is a twisted take on the story and such a strong meaning behind your words here too. You should be proud of this write, I agree with you, for this is true poetry.
Clappies for you
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