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Existence

A flower so beautiful
Now with wilting pedals
Everyday one more disappears
A memory of what once was beautiful
Slowly fading away.
Eventually ceasing to exist
As though it was never there

Leaving no trace of its existence
Copyright ©2008
~ACG~

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  • Yemassee gold member
    November 11

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    Here your flower is a symbol for our fleeting lives. That existence is beautiful but all too transient. It fades away and what remains? Just the memory that others have of us, while they exist. Nicely done!


  • chilali
    December 1, 2008

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    Wow. Beautiful. You have left me speechless with this one. A great write. Thank you for your entry and good luck to you

    Much love
    Ylova


  • Ken-Maverick
    November 30, 2008

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    JUDGED!!

    A unique take on the prompt indeed,
    What dies will live in memories
    Well done

    All the best to you and thanks for the entry

    Ken