The spark
arises,
unquenchable,
demanding
the unconscionable,
penetrating explosion.
Dark spark.
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The spark
arises,
unquenchable,
demanding
the unconscionable,
penetrating explosion.
Dark spark.
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Author notes
Unlocking the door....
to a pathway that could be interpreted
in a personal sense as well as in a global scope...
In a list
A contest entry
- Micro-Poetry by Yemassee.
631 points, ended December 3, 2008, 31 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Words come alive when answered in kind.
Comments
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these few words crafted in expression - felt, and of course the added impact of the art. great work.
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"Micro" poetry would seemingly demand
that each word be highly expressive!
Thank you, Rick,
M-C
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i like the challenge of such word limits and often find the distilled expressions that result intriguing. yours here is a very nice example.
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The backstory to the compressed thought--
had been watching news reports of the
so called '"clean cut" young men
who had entered Mumbai (known as Bobmbay
to us from earlier days, romanticized
in old movies) strolling the streets,
entering the hotel, ready to set off
mutilple explosions.
But the words also could be turned
toward a more personal interpretion.
The joy of words---what is said and
what is left unsaid---for the reader
to speculate upon...
Your comments always get to the
heart of the matter.
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I believe that the sub-conscious mind is the gateway to many worlds and inter-dimensions. This piece had a very ethereal feel to it. Very beautiful, that carried me away to somewhere else. Well done.
Dark Wishes
Wayne Leon
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Uncanny---how you zoned in
on the one piece of mine
with a "dark spark."
Ah, yes, the subconscious,
the birthplace of the artist's
dreams before they become reality!!
Thank you for the thoughtful comment!
M-C
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I really enjoyed this, not only your words, but your art really adds to it. Simplistic yet awwing ( is awwing a word- I don't know) I see why you took the silver for this treasure
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Hi, Gypsy!
The urban dictionary inlcudes it---awesome dirivative, aweing.
Liking that! Nice to see you here.
M-C
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This has me thinking of every important begining....
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The meainings were multiple---from the eleven word challenge by Yem.
Actually one was the horrid event that was taking place in Mumbai,
what had been known in the past as Bombay, the intruders, looking
so "normal" by some descriptions, making their way in so easily,
bringing pre-planned destruction.
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when there is more time I'd like to hear more about it. It does bring a different perspective to what you wrote.
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Start the fire dear sister...wow
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Whew, so impactful...it still lingers on my mind
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Thank you, lullaby.
It is nice to know one's words
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for sure, I am glad these didn't
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at the bottom of your poem, click on the list link. If it scares you, yell and I will remove.
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Well, that is very nice of you.
Such good company, too!!!!!
As you can seee, I have not yet attempted
the gathering together for list making.
Will focus on it soon, to shorten focused list.
Have titles---headings--in mind.
Once I start and know what I am doing
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Lists are kind of fun to make...well, fun for someone who likes annoying details like in Accounting, lol.
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Remember, loper calls me the artist with an accountant's mind.
TAKE CARE!!!!
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Oh and can I add it to a list I have, which I'm going rather slow in adding poems to...
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Can I borrow this for my author page? The poem...I'd put it in a border. Yell if no.
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No yelling from me!
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and may there be no end ...
to your pathway!
The lark
surprises,
un-drenchable!
commanding
the unmentionable,
penetrating implosion …
Light quark!
j
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Aha! Now that is a take
to wrap one's mind around!!!
"Light quark!" !!!!!!!!!
Thank you, Joy, for opening more avenues!!
M-C
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Excellent word. Reminds me of Buddhist masters' work!
Bravo!
Marianne
Excellent interpretation of the picture!
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Thank you, Marianne.
Often the art comes first, but this time
the eleven words inched onto the page,
setting the stage for the drawings to emerge
from penline on blank paper.
M-C
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Beautiful and original
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Thank you, Sandra.
Nice of you to visit!
M-C
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An original write. Congrats on your silver trophy.
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Thank you, Judy.
Nice to see you here!
M-C
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I really have nothing more to say here. I just thought it deserved a few more points in insanely happy clappie yellow dudes.
I've written a poem/story or two (ok, maybe 100) with with hidden meanings/deeper meaning...ok, I can't say more. It's good, very good.
Now I will just watch the insanely happy clappy yellow dudes do their stuff....
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Ah, Ima, making life more complete, watching the "insanely happy clappy
yellow dudes"---reminding us that life is fun, if we let it be, if we search
for the fun.
Thank you, Ima, for putting on your green suit, your hat and cane, and your spats
to generate the clappies!!!!
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I see it as reproduction; a species' overwhelmingly powerful drive to recreate itself and continue to exist.
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Ah, rocky, life begets life, love begets love
and all the other emotions.
I, also, dually envisioned the words refelecting the scenes in Mumbai
as I had been watching the unfolding all thru the nights, the perpetators
so "clean cut" as one person described them, fitting in so handsomely,
setting the spark, aligning with compatriots already registered and
in a room, dark spark, indeed.
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well now, so short (well i guess it had to be), i enjoy the intensity of the lines. the three single word lines work very well, grabs the reader from the beginning. the closing line leaves me wondering! i enjoyed the picture, your sketches always inspire.
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Short! For someone who took ten parts to finish a short story
that still isn't really finished, eleven words is VERY short!
It was intended to bring on some wondering...
Thank you, loper.
M-C
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strong words
You have used powerful words to describe the action; the subject is vague but disquieting. This is a difficult form, I think! Good luck!
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Hello, Margaret When multiple thoughts and happenings
bombard the mind. words may be applicable to more
than one interpretation, it seems.
Yes, fewer words tend to be less explanatory.
M-C
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Good luck in this contest Mumsy.
summer51
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Hi, summer!
Thank you,
Mumsy
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i see a brain synapse exploding with a creative thought from the deep dark unknown. but that's just me ---
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Ah, PJ the "just you" interpretation
is inventive, prompting a vision in the mind
of our plexi-towers awash in explosive thought,
multi-colored, from light to dark!!!
Hmmmmmm.....new drawing to ponder...
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the mind towers, where creativity explodes, colorful, blindingly bright, instantaneous insight.
speaking of which, interesting things going on here today, which this reminds me of. cross your fingers for good luck.
BTW -- happy birthday to brittany -- and me!! -
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Oh crud, MC told me yesterday and then I went and forgot! I hate me sometimes. Maybe I was just so excited over Britney's big day that I just ignored everything else!
I send you one day old Moxie as a gift...its been opened and a few sips have been had...and it's diet...and it's umm, empty...and I want the returnable back.
Happy belated birthday!
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Well hi there little Yemmy. Thanks for the b-day present. Ummm, tasty. (I shook the bottle and got a few drops out.) I'm sending the returnable back, but you'll have to pay shipping and handling.
PS -- I've been thinking the avatar was some sort of fiery flame, but now I realize it's a gaseous Moxie belch ~
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Hah! With Yem it's the thought that counts!
oooooooo, good one, PJ---the Moxie fire!!!! -
I have this thing for fire...not in real life, just in fiction. I've had a number of characters end up in flames.
Pretty much they either down down a well or up in flames!
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fire good
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So, your birthday celebration
seems contingent on the
"interesting things going on"
there today, right?
May this be one of your best birthdays!! -
Well, what a wondrous day!!!
Your birthday supercedes Britney on this page!!!
Mysterious message!
Not only will I cross them
I'll place hands together
in a heartfelt PJ prayer!
Hope everything works out
well for you---for you deserve it!!!
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well the birthday just happens to coincide with the interesting things going on. thanks for the prayer of support -- think physics!
btw - you can see what a britteny fan i am, can't even spell it~ -
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And just one more...
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yes, i'm loving this one!
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The name was just too crowded and small
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thanks!
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Can't ever stop at one...
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HAPPY BIRTHDAY, PJ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I'm particularly taken by your drawings here, Aes. I find it interesting how the first is in black and white with the orange spark and the final one in black and white with a blue auralike light. The full color is contained in the drawings inbetween.
The way your drawings are arranged with the words makes me think of going full circle. The blue light leads me to see the enlightenment at the end of the journey, maybe the lessons learned.
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The building blocks of inspiration. There's a true beauty in the simplicity of black and white drawings.
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Just as a group of words changes interpretation
by a few simple exchanges or by altering the emphasis,
a stark black and white drawing portrays clearly,
and then, with a touch of colored pencil,
a brush tip of watercolor or by playing
with special effects the mood can be altered
as also the the significance of the illustration.
And thus the story is told...as you discovered, Pixie.
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Ah, pix, in your creativity
you are also accurately analytical
as you examine the ptogressive
changes in the lines and the colors.
You are soooooo good!!!
M-C
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I see why Goes went down the path she did, I must admit, I'm following that path too and here is why:
1.) the word "unconscionable" Having no conscience or excessive, out of moderation. Not a word I would apply to inspiration (which was my first thought until that seemed not to be right.) Demanding excess, or that which is not reasonable, proper...that isn't a good spark, I don't think...which leads me to:
2.) dark spark: With that I can run all over the place and down different lanes and highways, but in the end, I see something sinister...maybe it is evil, or greed, or something more personal...or more general. And yet the drawings are beautiful, which leaves me perplexed...is this unconscionable thing so duplicitous as to seem beautiful...that would lead me down some moral paths which I've never known you to go, so I exclude those.
And now I just saw you note at the end, and I see you are smiling right now because you have sent me exactly where you wanted me to go...to those twin paths...personal and general (global)...and yes, some of my fiction has done that to readers. That's what makes writing so much fun to read...the interpretation of the work, and of the reader...in the end, I find myself studying both.
I did see this as a personal thing...your illness for example...there could be some meaning to this seed that I just don't have the knowledge to see.
And still, the title..."The portal" that brings me to what? It's ambiguous...could be positive or negative, it all depends.
But finally, the reader can't escape the dark images the poem contains, and that is the main thing...this dark spark...with it's power...and you may disagree but I say, iniquity. Suddenly I think I know what it is...but won't go there.
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Your brain child, the eleven word contest,
may as well have been a mystery contest,
for that is what is arising, as the brief
sets of words (all the entries in your contest)
beget volumes of words in interpretive discussions.
No matter the exact thoughts that propelled
the writer to select and order the words,
the infinite possibilities of meaning
propel the game, tease the brain!
Your interpretation is exceptional,
most interesting to follow.
Thank you for putting
your brain to it!
More later...
M-C
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The last photo has a blue spark. Blue is cold. Life and death sort of...
Yes, isn't it cool, all you guys giving me this stuff to shake the rust off my brain! And thanks for an exceptional poem! -
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Your contest---akin to opening a new playground for the mind!!!
A closer look at the color may reveal to you is is
turquiose, aquamarine, calm restored, well-being...
which, in itself, could be warming...
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Yes, I think for me, it's more about the chase than actually catching the meaning. If the meaning is right before me I'd probably run around it for a while just to get my exercise in.
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Yes, isn't that the fun part?
The excercise, the possibilities,
the mystery unsolved.....
anticipating the favorite muffins
before actually bring them home
and taking the first bite.
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I should have known. I know you well enough to know you write about positives as much as you can and not negatives...my theory, of mortality is more Der Golem's style.
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Der GrrrrrrrrGolem, he of glum face???
I have to think he is merely mortal
not to be afraind of that countenance!
Yes, the positive....finding it in a circuitous
manner, perhaps, shoving aside the darkness,
the doubts...
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bravo!
Spark of creativity... unquenchable (although it may seem so, temporarily, at times)and demanding... sometimes dark... always penetrating... As you say... so many interpretations... part of its beauty.
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Hi, Carma! Had just checked out your page last night
to see if you had been back!
The words, the concepts reminiscent of some
Carma pieces, depending on the interpretation.
Thank you!
M-C
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unquenchable, and demanding
love the word choice,
unquenchable because it is deceptive
demanding because of its need to be in contol,
you have dressed it up beautifully,
gold
God bless you my friend...
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Hi, Kathy!
Thank you for sharing thoughts.
I like your interpretation. As far
as the dressing it up---still playing
with some of the variations!
Love and hugs to you,
M-C
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Your poem left me wondering what dark sparks those could be...Seems like something we can't control and we do whatever takes to have it or make it, and the consequences might be disastrous.
With just 11 words you wrote something to make me think.
Well done stiring thought MC!
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A duality of thought running thru my mind.
Could have either personal or global interpretation...
Your "wondering" follows an interesting path.
Thank you, Mariza.
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Der Golem want to remind not to enter more than one...Master Kevin has glitch in the foundry...until Master Kevin fix...second entry kicks out first entry. Der Golem angry!
In Yem-speak, there is a problem here on AP it says 4 are allowed but it's not working right. So if you want to add another poem, wait until they fix it...if they fix it, because as my friend Tiggy says, "Nothing ever works."
I will let Yem or Ima do the official comment.
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Thank you, Der for the announcement!
My, you look glum!
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