Skies keep falling upon this life
they sealed away,
balancing upon sharpest knife
of this delay.
Another chapter written to cement
within these last white rooms breathing torment.
In this "freedom", this cage of lies
they built for me,
insanity a kind surprise
I guarantee.
Another song written to old regret
within these white rooms trying to forget.
Sealed away from your gentle touch
grasping my soul,
illusion that my heart shall clutch
in words you stole.
Another tear written to our madness
within my white rooms built out of sadness.
I seek to be free ,
for once I can see
this cage you made me
from our loves debris.
I am free
in my madness.
© Denierim
November 30, 2008
Author notes
This poem was inspired by a song "Bright White Jackets" by April Smith that was the prompt for the contest I entered. It was a beautiful and deep song with a lot of meanings behind and it inspired me a lot. I'm not yet sure if I like the outcome of the poem itself but I'm rather satisfied.
A contest entry
- Bright White Jackets by AutumnsFlame.
2667 points, ended January 20, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think - be as bold as you can; I don't break.
Comments
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Beautiful.
Very beautiful. This is what I was looking for in my contest--- some really good unique imagery and a tone in which the reader can FEEL what is going on. You rocked this piece. Good job! Thank you for entering my contest. -
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Thank you for holding the contest; it was a lot of fun. And there were great entries in it, that's a fact.
And thank you also for your words; I'm so very glad you like this. ^_^
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I really like the wording, images and depth of emotion in this. I like the flow, read nicely.
Well done!
best wishes in your contest
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Thanks for reading it and I'm very glad you like it.
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wonderful piece!
love the imagery! -
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Thanks a million; I'm glad you like it.
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fantastic poem
very well penned -
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Thank you; I'm glad you like it.
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