When right is wrong, you know, and left is right;
And all is topsy-turvy, upside down!
When night is day, you know, and dark is light;
And they all laugh at you like at some clown!
When fools, like them, keep saying you're insane;
And voices weird you hear inside your head!
When just confusions, delusions remain;
And you are always blue, or often red!
When nonsense is all that you seem to say;
And reality's twisted like a dream!
When that ghostly presence won't go away;
And you can do nothing but curse and scream!
Then the diagnosis is psychosis or neurosis;
Yet, if you comprehend this, there's a hopeful prognosis!
Author notes
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Azgar
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I agree.
This reads like you're my shrink.
It also says what I used to say to her. "I'm not nuts, just misunderstood." She couldn't seem to understand me so, I fired her. Guess what? I'm still slightly off but, I realize so is the rest of the world. I loved this poem especially the last line. -
A great write, very interesting poem i loved it
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i like it alot. I wouldnt change anything about it if were. written this way it states what you are trying to say .
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creative entry for contests. sonnet is one of my favorite forms, although it's tough to create a great one. your sonnet is very nice, and i am not sure if you did on the purpose by not following 10 syllables per line? nevertheless, this poem supposed to be schizophrenic anyway. ahaha good luck.
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hahah has a quircky feel to it
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There is a jagged scattering of the expected iambs and eccentric little points of grammar and diction here, which gives it an edgy quality, a jumpy rhythm well suited to the subject matter. The 14-syllable lines in the couplet came as a great surprise.
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lol quite random. I liked the ideas behind this poem, but I want to know more, you know what I mean? What do the voices say? "you are always blue, or often red!" What kind of red? what kind of blue? This is a great start but it doesn't have enough information, would have loved to know more. Perhaps I am just a sucker for detail.
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GREAT
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love it! very clever...and so very true. I feel the same so often. Like im backwards and the opposite to the world. Very impressive write. Keep it up and good luck with the contests
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Brilliant!!!
Good luck in the contest!!!
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This is so interesting and thought provoking...
I loved reading it!
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what a delightful take on this title prompt
you seemed to have fun with this one, or at
least, it felt like it while reading Thank you
so much for entering. Love, Lane -
Thank goodness I can comprehend! This sonnet is a treat to read and makes so much sense. I have a friend who's a Psychiatrist. Can I print and give this to her?
Love,
Amera♥
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I'd love that
and tell me what your friend thinks, too
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