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Vampir Naştere

I can still feel the glorious pain of it
The deep ache that seems to seep into my soul
I know I can't fight it
And strangely that doesn't bother me

 

The cold is my comfort now

Winter's fingers send tremors down my spine

Before I would have hated these frigid nights

But something inside me has changed

 

I can now feel the hunger

And despite all I eat 

I can still feel this ravenous desire

I begin to contemplate the sustenance of blood

 

Author notes

Just a little something I wrote after watching Twilight... though Twilight didn't inspire me, it was the bite I received from Tranquil-words that brought this about. The title is Romanian and means "vampire birth."

Okay, due to the number of comments I am receiving about Twilight, I would like to clarify that this poem is not about Twilight. It wasn't even inspired by Twilight, I simply wrote it after watching Twilight. My inspiration was wrestling in the cold and being bitten a few times when we got home from watching the movie.

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  • emoempess
    April 24

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    this poem is dark....
    and i do love twilight
    a lot
    plz visit this site
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  • tears.of.silence
    April 13

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    very nicely done. I saw this entered into my contest the day that you did enter and I have been waiting to read it. Excellent work you did not let me down. You have two poems in this contest and your points will be divided. Gret work indeed you've made a 45 on this poem. Thanks for entering the contest and best of luck to you. Kahy


  • ennovy silver member
    April 2
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    very dark deep thoughts....reaching into the open soul of one bitten....thank you for entering our contest....Novy & Brazos


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    April 2
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    I hate twilight too, but this was awesome, great work! Creative (: Keep writing


  • Jazzlyn
    April 1
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    very good and i loved how you used romanian in the poem great
    good luck in the contest


  • Night Terrors
    April 1

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    personally I hate Twilight, but your poem was very creative and well written. I really enjoyed it. That was very clever of you to use Romanian in the title Thanks for entering


  • Blue-Rose Beauty gold member
    March 31
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    No.. but.. Um ok?


  • Kathraina silver member
    March 28

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    Nicely written. Great job on this piece!
    Good imagery and flow. I love the simplicity of it.
    Bravo!!!


    ♥ Kate

  • ennovy silver member
    March 4

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    This is an very wonderful read....sort of like hearing a deep low voice speaking........thank you for entering...Novy & Brazos


  • KitLynn
    December 1, 2008
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    I liked it, Sara. (:


  • albinoblacksheep720
    November 30, 2008

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    Nice job. I love the title. It's short, sweet, and to the point. I like it. It had imagery. I like it. Nice job Good luck

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