I went to class on Monday,
[Tuesday, Wednesday, Friday]
and Thursday went missing again.
I had to work on Wednesday,
[Thursday, Friday, Saturday, Sunday...]
and drank whiskey until the November air
didn’t bite down quite so hard.
My fingernails need trimming.
The bathroom towels are behind on rotation.
My front tires are bald.
I need to re-dye my hair.
And, as the freshly laid snow
crunches beneath my argyle sneakers,
I wonder how long you’ve been
tracking me
and leaving post-it notes on my windshield.
Author notes
Hope I didn't lose your attention and comprehension. 
My mind is a scary place, after all. You're brave to follow.
A contest entry
- Footprints by Peteskid.
1500 points, ended December 5, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be brutal. I can take it.
Comments
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with this write, you thoroughly have the reader's attention ... no worries about losing anyone.
thanks.
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I get it! The judge gets it just fine...and very well done; wonderful imagery here :crunching snow, the hectic rush seemingly to nothing inparticular, student life reflectively done...and the issue..someone leaving footprints in life so to speak... I like this it has a mirror quality. Thank you for the fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK
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"I wonder how long you’ve been
tracking me
and leaving post-it notes on my windshield."
Not sure if that was meant to be literal, or figurative.... But I like it, nice write.
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*beats you with stick* This is wonderful. Your mind is far from a scary place, seemingly it is very nice. ...I really liked this piece, best of luck in the contest.
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Ouchee!
Haha... thanks, I think.
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