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Rayment's Hill

We scaled the heights of Rayment's hill
Far beyond the city lights
Snow was falling wind was high
An angel's calling and no one heard
Though we listened huddled close
Nerves all stretched taut like a bow
We held our breath hoping the magic held
And tried to ignore its calling voice
We thought that this was the end
We held on tight to what we knew
Hearts were thumping in the gloom
To late to run nowhere to go

So we held our silence and our tongues
It snowed so hard beyond the glen
No miracle that ever endured
Like water into wine ensued
For doors once crossed and never closed
As night soon follows every day
We were connected each and every one
We felt all a part of this scenery
And though the end felt very near
No one moved a muscle just in case
There was another door to open

Let this illusion of smoke and mirrors
Hide the light that shines within
With words that come like silhouettes
And hide our thoughts like shadow smiles
For in these hollow and sacred times
There are none so blind who will not see
While this angel's blight that threatened all
And burn away this smoky veil
For these are bleak, uncertain times
And magic has no cure that lasts
We cast our lot into the wind
And finally found a place called home

Author notes

AP name: m y r i a d - d a r k

lyrics inspired by the book 'Weaveworld' by Clive Barker
"Imagination is just the window to the private worlds we all live in."

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  • The cliche typo
    June 15
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    ?

    wich option?


  • edit my world.
    January 9
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    too many contests. this is being removed


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    January 9
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    A nicely rendered piece, thanks for entering


  • Mr Id
    December 28, 2008

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    We held on tight to what we knew
    Hearts were thumping in the gloom

    I realy like the way you present people's attitudes toward angels.

    This seems a very realistic scene, and angels are mentioned, but you son't say whether they are real within this universe of the poem. I think this is really cool.

    I was expecting a sad ending (which in mind would have been more appropriate considering the rest of the poem). This is the only qualm I have, but that's just me.

    Cool work- luck in contest!


  • MisJudged
    December 14, 2008

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    We held on tight to what we knew

    I love that line. The poem was beautiful. The ending was impactful. A very great write.


  • ASmileForYou
    December 11, 2008
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    This was a very calming and beautiful poem. The imagery was perfect. Thanks for entering!


  • ShiningNShadows
    December 3, 2008

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    That was very touching. I really enjoyed the imagery and the wording. Nice job. Good luck in my contest!

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