I scream.
[he smiles]
I cry.
[he smiles]
I trip.
[he smiles]
I studder.
[he smiles]
I laugh.
[he smiles]
I lie.
[he smiles]
"I love you."
[he smiles]
"I know."
[he s m i l e d.]
Author notes
This one was kindof confusing, I guess.
But basically, it was about someone growing on you as you bcome closer.
After all; sometimes you find love in the most unlikely places.
In a list
A contest entry
- ~~Options~~ 3rd in Series!~ by movedon.
1050 points, ended December 14, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This was cute and lovely. I do think it would be a lot better if you didn't have the repetition like you have, but that's only a suggestion.
Good poem though -
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!
I am SO glad you asked me for a change of titles, because I am in love with this piece. It's not confusing at all, as I understand it perfectly!! I love the repeating [he smiles] dealio. SHEER BRILLIANCE!!! Wow...thanks for entering!!!!
Mylee -
Thanks for entering! Your title is
"My Heart Attack Was His Smile"
idk if you're a girl/guy, so if you want to change His to Her, you can, it doesnt much matter to me. Which ever you prefer
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