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Take My Hand

I don't want to go into this cold world by myself...
I'm not ready
I need to be comforted
Please....
Take My Hand

It's not what I thought it would be...
There is not peace to  be seen just hate and...
I'm not ready
I need to be loved
Please...
Take My Hand

I need to know that I'm being treated fairly..
But I'm not quite sure when it comes to that and
I'm not ready
I need to be acknowledged
Please...
Take My Hand

Time are getting harder by the second
People becoming homeless everyday
I'm not ready
I need to be cared for
Please...
Take My Hand

Take My Hand
And Never Let Go
Take My Hand
And Promise to stay

Take My Hand
And give me love
Take My Hand
And Acknowledged Me
Take My Hand
And care for me
Just.....Take My Hand

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  • irish17crazy
    December 2, 2008

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    very well done...I like the repetition in this one and can feel the thoughts right through the words... I'm kinda curious as to what was on your mind at the time. you mix some very real images of society and personal desires from the person in the poem. very good-keep writing!


  • Tadd
    December 1, 2008
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    well writen