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I Won't Be The Fool Again

Let's play this game we've grown to love
And gamble things we've never had
Let's take that chance you took before
I'll risk it all with hope to add

You roll those dice I've come to fear
I'll play the cards you wouldn't take
Let's expose ourselves to risk
And work our ways in hope to make

Let's figure out all that we've won
And make a fool of one just when
We thought we made a life so great
But I won't be the fool again

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  • Heroesrox
    March 4

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    aI agree with the eccentric red-head. This does have a beat to it. It's really great, especially for a rhyming piece. I loved your usage of the whole won't get fooled again thing! Great job!



  • Commodore Rouge
    December 2, 2008

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    Intense! Your rhyme has a nice slight beat to it, and I like it when the flow of phrases and words isn't interrupted (like in the second-to-last line) because one of the lines doesn't mark the end of a sentence. Something else that I noticed was that the first lines of each stanza seemed to make almost-perfect sense with the other first lines of the other stanzas, as well as the 2nd, 3rd, and 4th lines in their places. I just thought that was something cool you did, intentional or not. This song reminds me of the song "Long Shot" by Nevertheless, and that's a good thing.
    Thanks for sharing. This was fun to read.