Sometime you must think outside the box.
In the desert
I saw a creature, naked, bestial,
Who, squatting upon the ground,
Held his heart in his hands,
And ate of it.
I said, "Is it good, friend?"
"It is bitter---bitter," he answered;
"But I like it
Because it is bitter
And because it is my heart."
-Stephen Crane
Insane
A dream becoming reality,
Reality becoming a dream.
I belive we all have a chance,
To fall victim to this thing.
Its small, with teeth,
And it has a nasty growl,
I sometimes wake up at night,
And hear its awful howl.
It hungers for your memories,
The happy and the sad.
Its drawn to days long gone,
And the adventures that you had.
It wears no mask,
Yet it has no face,
And it comes and goes without a trace.
When people are infected,
We label them "insane",
For their past is like a book,
Being run over by a train.
They forget it all and start anew,
Regardless of their age.
I believe its called,
A childs developmental stage.
And as they cry and scream,
In the wake of those faceless fiends,
We wrap them up in suits so cold,
And throw them into cushioned holds.
We forget they're humans just like us,
And we get aggravated when they make a fuss.
We push and poke and taunt them, so they never have a chance to grow.
The maskless fiends are everywhere,
And when one falls to them we show no care.
We lock them up in padded rooms,
That will eventually become their tombs.
Insane is used to classify,
Those who had no chance to live their life.
They sit alone and whimper and moan,
As they watch the fiends strip them of all they know.
I wish we could help but theres nothing we could do,
Just try to remember the fiends could come get you.
~Poetically Challenged
Author notes
I just sat down, my pen did the rest.
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Excellent!
You wouldn't happen to be a nurse or a nurse aide would you? I am and this describes EXACTLY what it is to watch someone go through a mental disability or dementia. Perfectly written, in my mind.
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this is great stuff, enjoyed reading this, awesome job
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Oh forgot the clappies!
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Glad I stopped in to read this. Wonderful write! You did a great job at portraying the wildness that grows as insanity overwhelms. I have a few pieces that resemble this one, seems that loosing ones mind tends to be a great subject to draw from.Once again nice write!
xo
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this is really really good great flow great better than great imagry, just a really really strong poem
bravo
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line 29: they're
(sorry, i'm a bit of a grammar whore when it comes to homonyms, but as you can see I could care less about capitalization)
This is a great poem, very sad and very true. People are rarely understanding of such things
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thanks
i care about grammer as well, but i guess i was a little too sleepy when i did my spellcheck on this =]
thanks for the correction
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Excellent. Great form, rhyme and flow. Wonderful imagery too. Loved it...
~Lae
Le Dechaine Feu Tempete
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This is an awful story, but one that is so true. This is a beautiful write, the imagery is perfect, and your form is great! They way you worded everything was superb! Great write!
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