Where is the fair haired child yonder
The one that in ember fields would wander
The the child that brought such happiness
To us who had everything less
Her laugh brought such joy
To those who darkness employ
And with a smile
That stretched a mile
Where could this child be
The one that we yearn to see
In ember fields now gone
Perhaps she has gone to see the Son
In a list
A contest entry
- Peer Pressure Contest!! You decide the trophy winners!! by Zenda-Lokki.
1700 points, ended January 7, 77 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - all the prewrites you want (theres a catch) by serenity silvermoon.
400 points, ended January 7, 299 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I LIKE THIS TITLE A LOT.
fair haired -> fair-haired
This poem was evocative. Evocative of what I'm not sure xD
But w/e it evoked, it made me want to re-read it several times, so gj.
In ember fields now gone
Perhaps she has gone to see the Son
felt a tad unnecessarily redundant?
consider:
In ember fields now gone
Perhaps to see the Son
I'm about to sleep now, so I'll drop by to comment more tomorrow! -
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Well well nice to have interested you finally!!!! LOL
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How beautiful. This one is very thoughful.
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Yep I think I've read all the entries to this contest from you hehe xx
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This is an interesting write hun, I think you did really well with it. It flows really well. I reckon you'd be great at doing long lined rhyming couplets too. Great work xx
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this is really cool! i loved reading it. keep penning!
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Thanks very much! I wrote it out three times and was still worried it wasn't quite right
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