The tortured soul I know it well
It’s angst and sorrow ebbs and swells
Heart beating in its ivory cage
Pounding out its bitter rage
The burning cyclone from within
Blazing fire; fury’s sin
It casts into cyclonic haze
The ever-present endless maze
Caught up in the fury’s spell
The joy rides erupt into hell
The sunlight casts it out again
The torrent slowing to a spin
The spin cascades into a flow
The Poet’s Soul I live and know
The flow a long awaited tease
Before the torrent steals reprieve
Author notes
Quote: "The Poet's Soul is a Tortured one" originally said by I don't know!
A contest entry
- I reached 5 years, and forgot. by Beautiful Irony.
400 points, ended December 21, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be honest.. you wont hurt my feelings...
Comments
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I like this a lot.
I think my favourite part is the first two lines: "The tortured soul I know it well/It’s angst and sorrow ebbs and swells." You end very strongly as well, which is excellent!
Now, this may just be my accent, but "The sunlight casts it out again/The torrent slowing to a spin" doesn't fit the rest of your rhyming scheme. But, like I said, that may just be the way I read it.
I love your imagery, it really works well for me, and your flow is excellent. Overall, this is a very, very good poem. There are no wasted words, or lines that seem irrelevant: it all fits together and it illicits an emotional response from the reader. For me, it makes me think about how this refers to me, and my personality.
Love the artwork you've got to go with it, too.
Thank you for entering my contest
Sarah
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Thank you so much for the great review. Also, the artwork is mine as well.
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Yeah, I thought it might have been. It's very good!
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A wonderful poem
Great rhyme and flow, and a great take on the quote you chose.
Love the lines...
"The flow a long awaited tease
Before the torrent steals reprieve"
Excellent!!
Amazing art work you have to go with this too.
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